Rejected Sheet Christopher Black

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  1. Film_Noir

    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    Updated to the new template. Tossing it in for a re-review.
     
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    Approved!
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    #43 Film_Noir, Sep 18, 2018
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    Heya, you're Approved! again!
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    @Staff Roleplay (My previous reviewer is no longer staff.)
    Modified body stats based on this thread (changes marked in blue). No other changes made. A re-review is needed.
     
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    Hello mister Film_Noir!

    I have claimed this for review. Expect it shortly!
     
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    Sorry for the delay, approved!
     
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  8. Film_Noir

    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    Aged Chris up one year, based on his yearly birthday, and added +1 Statesman Knowledge. No need for a re-review.
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    Added +30 Admiral Knowledge from his new Proficiency Virtuoso Special Permission. Tagging @Eccetra to give it a quick check to make sure it's correct.
     
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    Updated proficiency points based on the new system. Needs a re-review.
     
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    Claimed for review.
     
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    AlphaInsomnia Inexplicable Explicative Staff Member Roleplay Staff

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    Here is my review:
    • I understand Chris' knowledge of Sofaal is rather lacking, and it is specified, but this should be removed from the languages section since he doesn't have the linguistic skills. It's fine to roleplay out, but having it on the page could make it confusing for progressions or events that would require character apps.
    But! That is the only issue I can see. Therefore, you are approved.
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    Tossing this into review. It's been a while, updated the points.
     
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    Claiming. Review inbound
     
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    @Film_Noir we begin
    • In regards to the Linguistic Knowledge point, it may be if benefit to allocate 4 points into Eastern Culture instead, as that would also cover the interaction aspects. Your choice if you want to make this shift.
    • The Regalian Naval Cutlass page no longer exists. Remove the link.
    • I forgot he spoke Alt-Regalian. Nice.
    • The Personality and Abilities section while nice, is fairly outdated. Please update to the new question prompt or the three part summary.
    • Add a bit in regards to after the Bone Horror Crisis. You only had a hiatus for about a year, so there's a lot to add.
    when you have finished, please tag me
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    @FireFan96 All done.
    • Left it as Linguistic Knowledge because Chris has no interest in, e.g., Eastern religion, and so on. He just wants to conquer and convert them all.
    • Old link removed.
    • He does, yes!
    • Updated to the new Personality and Abilities template. (Kept the old writing too as an expansion.)
    • Added a bullet point summary at the end of the Life Story, summarising his main, more recent, exploits.
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    @FireFan96 Added Nautilaan lineage and associated additional Maritime Knowledge points. (Probably doesn't need a re-review, but tagging you in case you wanted to look over it.)
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    @FireFan96 Tossing it into re-review due to the Proficiency System overhaul.
     
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    I'd like you to invest the extra 2 point for linguistics for Sofaal. With the update, the investment isn't as high for Chirstopher's character. If you wish to reduce competency ic, that's fine, but I'd like to have the 3 points invested to make it "official"

    let me know when you make this change @Film_Noir
     
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    Film_Noir Snowdonian Pirate

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    @FireFan96 Done. I forgot to re-add in his Nautilaan "Favoured by the Sea" Passive Ability before too and so that's now done.
     
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