Basic Information Full Name: Aurelia Jackson {Name she has given herself} Age: 19 years old Gender: Female Race: Solvaan-Altalar Sexuality: Bisexual Preferred Weapon: LongBow Visual Information Eye Color: Grey Hair Color: Brown Hair Style: long and Wavy Skin Color: Pale, Light Skinned Height: 5'8 Skill Information Total Points: 24 Proficiency Points ,10 Hobby Points , 10 Talent Points +10 Light Bow Combat +5 Fist Combat +6 Alchemy Science +3 Painting Art (+3 Hobby Points) +2 Writing Art (+2 Hobby Points) +3 Drawing Art (+3 Hobby Points) +2 Mixology Art (+2 Hobby Points) +10 Stealth Rouge(+10 Talent Points) Body Shape Body Stat: 15 (1 x 10 (LB) + 1 x 5 (F) = 15) Toned Body Shape Low Body Fat Personality and Abilities Alignments: Neutral Personality Type: Architect Religion: Void Cultism (Devoted: 5/10) Special Traits/Spells/Mutations Vampire Mutations, Including: Von Kërle Bloodline. Base Vampire stats Immortal aging -Doesnt age Physically Karmark Feeding - when sinking their teeth into the neck of their victim, it causes a partial paralysis Von Kërle Functioning - Can eat/drink normal food Von Kërle Appearance - Constant red eyes with eye whites. When feeding, eye whites turn to black Karmark Step - able to detect any kind of Hunting Proficiency designed trap, snare that would require them to walk into it. Karmark Raven - The Vampire can summon a Raven (even underground) to intercept an incoming mundane projectile. Karmark Beast - The Vampire gains a permanent (so long as they are Vampire) familiar. Karmark Song - he Vampire can summon blood-sung weapons made out of crystallized blood with the toughness of steel. Languages Modern Altalar Common Life Story Aurelia was born to her parents in a small village on a farm. She helped her parents with tending the fields and feeding the animals.( Birth / Childhood ) She didn't make many friends when she was a young child since she mostly helped on the farm. She spent most of her time exploring the forest that was near the village in her free time.( Childhood) During the ages 10 - 18 she started to go on adventures deep into the forest.( Adolescence) One day as she was coming home from one of her adventures she found her village was in ashes. She ran to where her home once stood but ran into a some thing which had the stench of blood on them . She was jumped by one of the things, feeling sharp teeth breaking through her skin and Aurelia fell unconscious.(she was 19 years old at time point). She thought "this is it... i am going to die here.." But she heard the sound of people attacking the creature then everything went dark. Aurelia woke up after a couple of days to find her self on the ground where her home burnt to ash. (significant life event 1) she realized the creature that attacked her was a vampire and she had become one as well. (Significant life event 2)(At this point in her life story is where she will begin Role playing)
Hey friend! Just going to do a simple peer review for you. :) If you don't know what a peer review is, it is someone going to give you tips/suggestions to better your app and correct it, though they are not staff usually! A staff member will give you the final a-okay I keep getting only 21 points spent for your age points which is 24, if you want, you have 3 points left to spend. I suggest you number 1-10 how devoted the character is with the Void Worshipping, simply just say- for example 6/10 or the likes! For this, there should be a section where you can choose five mutations. It's under the section you got this from since the Von Kerle bloodline with Karmark Feeding, function, etc, are considerably Common Mutations, as everyone of the bloodline has them! But under that section, there are individual mutations you can choose from, to which you have access to five!
Hey Starlight! Gonna add onto Faith's Peer Review. Minimum height for a Solvenn Altalar is 5'8" Solvenn Altalar can only reach shades of dark brown, not pure black for hair color. This should be under a spoiler The minimum age one can be a vampire is seventeen. She cannot be turned when she was... I'm assuming below ten. You could use a timeline-bullet point system, like so birth/childhood significant life event 1 adolescence significant life event 2 etc. Since she is an Altalar, she can also know Modern Altalar. All up to you though!
My sole question is to ask that you please show the calculation process to reach 19, or fix the calculation because I can't figure out how you achieved 19.
i have removed 3 points from Medical Science and added 3 points to Alchemy Science in the Skill information.
They would need some heavy edits as they're several systems and rewrites behind on things. I would recommend re familiarizing yourself with the lore and character application template, proficiency information etc. In short, no, but you can rp them without an application in the meantime.
Would you like me to reject the application in the mean time while you work on getting yourself up to date? You can always put it into re-review later! Here are some links that could be beneficial: https://wiki.massivecraft.com/New_Roleplayers'_Guide https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Vampirism https://wiki.massivecraft.com/Altalar#Solvaan
