Rejected Sheet ~ Archard Maurice Fleurance ~

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  1. ScaledSupremacy

    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    Basic infortmation.
    • Full name : Archard Maurice Fleurance.
    • Age : 47 years.
    • Gender : Male
    • Race : Ithanian (Citoyen) Ailor.
    • Main ambition : Influence among the upper and lower classes of Regalia.
    • Special permission : Te'suik Vampirism.

    • Archard first came to Regalia two years ago after he betrayed an old and very influent friend of his in his home town, the man's gang affiliation and power, forcing him to leave. He lives in a large estate near the near the harbour district. It is well decorated and filled with shinies and antiques from his homeland. He tends to do paperwork and academics for barional families in search of someone to manage the numbers of their industry or buissnes.

    • Archard was born by an unknown mother and given to an Orphanage in the countryside regions of Ithania, from where he was later adopted by a pair of high class Ithanian Te'suik Vampires. He was their only child so he had their full attention and care, his mother was extremely over protective of him and rarely allowed him to leave the house. They had scholars from all around Ithania come to their estate and he was taught things like Acting, Poetry, Art, Philosphy, Elven language, grammatics and academics, Regalian and Alt-Regalian. He never knew of any outside family as both his parents had either killed or outlived their relatives. And neither did he know any of his real family.

    • The Ithanian seeks to gain a little more money to promptly hire servants and perhaps even start his own buissnes, however he doesn't want the attention of becoming a full noble due to his vamprism, usually just sticking to the shade of the media. Instead he'd try to mimic their lifestyle and converse with them to gain valuable friends and allies.

    Visual information.
    • Eye color : Sky blue to crimson (Depending on bloodlust)
    • Hair color : Light blonde.
    • Hair style : Slightly scruff and wild but still kept tidy and clean as to not grow too long or become a hygiene problem.
    • Skin color : Pale white.
    • Clothing : Depends on his enviroment and the occasion, though usually he'd wear a fine, dark green or black patterned suit with a hankerchief at the neck and golden lining along with a set of leather shoes and white silk gloves. He also wears a long black cloak with a hood and several pockets.
    • Height : 6,0 ft
    • Weight : 171lbs approx 77-78 kilogram
    • Body build : Athletic.
    • Weapon of choice : Blood magic : Mage level in the sub schools Hemostatis and Hemocurse and caster Sanguine Thrist. He is student in Touch of the void. Archard is also mage level in Shadow magic's sub-school "Shadow meld"

    • Archard has a long, oval face with soft and curvy features. He would have long protruding lips and a set of well maintanenced teeth with a sharp pair of fangs in his upper row. A pair of slim deep set eyes. marked by a set of straight and fairly bushy eyebrows. He would have a very soft and round chin along with a pair of large ears, pressed in towards his head. His aquiline and slightly lifted nose would have a long, thin scar across it from an unfortunate accident. Archard has a fairly long neck with a very prominent adam's apple and an unusual birthmark would show behind his left ear, taking the shape of a poorly drawn heart. His jaws are perfectly aligned with eachother and he has round chin but fairly straight jawlines. The lad has softly protruding cheekbones and tends to wear a hint of make up to cover his almost permanent bags under his eyes. His usual resting face consists of a stern, yet adorable set of eyes and a cocky smile. Wether the smile is intentional or not, he doesn't really know, it was a habit that kinda just grew on him.

    • His bodybuild is rather athletic and most of his muscle is centered in his legs and abdomen, making him a good sprinter and a fine acrobatic though he does not tend to excercise that frequently so much of the potential he could have, is wasted by sitting around lazily and doing paperwork. However he is still a fair sprinter and has excellent motoring skills. While he is entering his mid fourties his vampirism sustains him in the state of a 20-30 year old. His entire body would look pretty straight at first glance but upon closer inspection his shoulders would be a bit less wide than most males and his arms are long and slim and can also seem a little clumsy at times. He has a pretty strong lower half and tends to utilize that to a decent potential for fast getaways or jumping. Archard only has a small amount of body hair centered around his upperlegs, genetallia , and armpits, otherwise he is pretty smooth all over. Generally he is pretty slim, with the most weight probably caused by his legs and bones as opposed to fat and muscle. Once, during a horse riding competition, Archard was thrown off sending him into a five foot drop and dislocating his shoulder. As a result, the bones eventually grew back together but not nearly as strong as before and the joint was damaged. Physically demanding tasks such as lifting heavy objects would send a sharp jab of pain through his shoulder, along with being physically inept in strength, and it is also more prone to breaking again.

    • Archard tends to wear the previously mentioned suit but will go to even further effort on special occasions to trump or outmatch the other guest's. Sometimes resulting in a suit so fancy it would almost be deemed uncessisary and over the top. He carries around a self-invented feeding contraption that utilizes a pair of small needles to pierce the skin and then applying a manual vaccum caused by squeezing a bubble of tough leather (like the thing on a bicycle horn) and then leading the bloodstream through a tube with another tube diverting into a small attachable vial with dark glass to conceal the liquid. The entire system would be incased in a golden metal case, making it resemble a large bottle opener slightly. He also carries a small bottle of grounded ruby flower, mixed with milk which he consumes if he has a kidney failure. He wears white silk gloves with patterned frills around the wrists. He also possess a white, golden patterned mask as featured in the refrence picture that he will wear on special occasions when getting together with other of his kind. He preffers shinier colours like red and gold and he likes the anonymity Black provides, resulting in his perticular style of clothing. When it comes to Jewelry, Archard only carries a silver band with golden patterns of a snake chasing it's own tail around his finger.

    • He usually speaks with a strong Ithanian accent and certain ithanian words here and there. His tone of voice is usually pretty well spoken and he tends to utter his words perfectly except for the accent. His tone is fast and confident and he will rarely slip up. Another thing about his speech is that he rarely stops to hear what other people has to say and will almost always break in if he feels that he needs to say something, immediatly feeling that whatever he has to say is ten times as important than anything else. It can come off as very rude and annoying. He speaks fluent Ithanian, Regalian, and Alt-Regalian but struggles a little with his elvish though still speaks and writes it to a somewhat decent degree. Mind you, all of his languages are with a heavy high-class Ithanian accent.

    Personality and Abilities

    Personality traits


    • Arrogant : Archard grew up being a little spoiled brat, he was never once told to behave otherwise or that he ever did anything wrong as no one dared to question his upbringing due to rumors and the fact that his dad controlled alot of the gang activity in the area along with his Te'suik collegues. As a result of this he grew very arrogant, prioritzing himself and his endeavors above everyone else's. He's used to getting what he wanted and to this day if something goes wrong or he is intercepted and blocked from a certain possession he wished to have he will become very tempermentful, attempting to destroy whatever item he wished for so no one could have it. This childish anger is very common for him, even in daily when maybe a guard patrol blocked the way to the park and he had been looking to go for a stroll, he would remain grumpy for the rest of the day. Personally I consider it very close to how Kylo Ren went ham on that control pannel in the new star wars film.

    • Coquet : Archard has a tedency to flirt around and seduct women from whom he exclusively drinks from. It is a key ingredient in his feeding method where he doesn't consider it a hunt as much as an act, in which he seducts a female individual to a certain point, then feeds off of them when they're off guard. Sometimes he will go around flirting and playing with women for pure amusement and sport. He almost does it spontaniously now, letting out random flirts in a conversation and kinda just glossing them over as if they were completely natural. This can lead to alot of weird misunderstandings and loud fights.

    • Confident : Kinda adding to his arrogance, Archard never sees any error in his ways, leaving him with extreme confidence that all he does is right. This is a really useful trait for manipulating and lying as his facade will rarely slip up but can also be a disadvantage if he is outnumbered or simply outmatched. For an example if he got agitated by a buff orc he might hit it without realizing the aftermath of the orc beating him within an inch of his life. Nervousness is a naught with him and he hardly breaks a sweat when manipulating or mimicing another personality as he has somehow just convinced himself within his mind that whatever he does or says is the one and only truth.

    • Snob : The Ithanian is very quick to judge and stigmatize other people, purely from their looks, social status, clothing, or wealth. Anyone that isn't male or nobility is instantly considered prey to him and he loves to show off his home and wealth. Bragging is one of the best things he knows and does so frequently to all nobility or anyone that would "rival" his own status. He absoloutely despises people who think themselves above him and will internally hate them but try to get closer and ruin as much of their power as he could. This also leaves him striving for more wealth and power to better himself and raise himself above others like he used to do back home. A thing he realized lately is that nobility draws in too much media and with his vampirism, that was something he didn't want so he tries to stay away from the noble scene and stick to the shadow. This sort of conflicts his personality but he is clever enough to deny his irritation in favor of not being discovered.

    • Secretive / Paranoia : Being raised by vampires has left him with a very secretive life, and so he carries on that tradition in a sense. He will only very rarely spill anything about his past, rather making up stories and events instead. Unless the person knew of their vampirism, he would never even consider hinting any ties to vampirism. His secretive and mysterious state of mind has left him with a sort of paranoia, constantly suspecious that people recognize him for what he is and plotting to kill him. He would be completely frantic if he ever spilled anything of his vampirism to some randomer or nobleman and attempt on the person's life. He keeps tight schedule of what people know of his vampirism or are suspecious and who of them are alright, dead, or just not a threat.

    • Over-Dramatic : Archard tends to be a drama queen, he always acts like it all is some elaborate act and will perform very formally and well spoken, with sudden outbursts and exclamations where de deems fit. He likes to build up tension and use dramatic terms. Such as "How old where you when you joined us in the darkness?" or "Death comes for us all, alas.. Not today my friend, not today. For today... /I/ am death! And yours nontheless!" He also has a thing, inspired by his vampirism, that makes him like to wear really gloomy and dramatic outfits. He always wears a long black cape for an example and doesn't mind getting a bit eccentric when it comes to accesories. (Especially masks)

    • Sadistic : His twisted and unusual upringing has left him with very little respect for others and life. Having watched alot of suffering he has grown used to it and even enjoying it to some extention. Whilst he does not neccisarily enjoy causing other people pain himself, he loves to see other people misfortune such as, being robbed, being tortured or beaten by others and tripping or breaking bones. Though he is simply too lazy to practice pain upon others to sate this hunger, but he is always looking for trouble and will often try and make friends with stronger or more sadistic people like him. These types of people would be criminals and other vampires, especially possessed individuals whom he can actually have alot of affection for compared to other people, both truly romantically and friendly.

    • Obsessive compulsive disorder : Archard has a case of OCD. It mostly makes him a neat freak and he is heavily annoyed by asymmetrical patterns. Also colours that don't match very well like blue and orange or green and red can annoy him. Over the years he has learned to deal with it and ignore it but sometimes if it gets really bad he would go to great lengths to change it. He will still sometimes seem a bit ticked if he's near something asymmetrical, like occasional frowning, blinking and trying to avoid looking at it. That is also a reason he particularly enjoys shadow magic because it allows him to travel unconditionally around in darkness with nothing to annoy him.

    (It should be noted that he has very good acting skills and is pretty clever, making him able to mask most of his personality traits very well so if you encounter him and he is not acting like this, it might be an act. Although I will throw hints of the char traits in here and there. I might make some personality traits for his "alternate egos" at one point after he's accepted. Look out for them ;D))

    Strengths

    • Perceptive : He has exceptionally keen perception when it comes to smaller details and has an easy time remembering things he's seen or written. For an example he could look at a tree for a small ten minutes and almost be able to draw it perfectly from that. This can in some cases be bad though as it enforces his OCD with patterns. This however makes him an excellent learner along with his great intellect. He would have little trouble remembering dance or spell patterns another person made or showed him. If he followed a person for long enough he could even perfectly imitate their walk pattern.
    • Reflexes : Archard has a very short response time and almost instantaneous reactions to insults or attacks. For an example if a dwarf suddenly popped out and tried to swing an axe at his knee, he would have little trouble stepping out of the attack zone whilst keeping a relaxed posture, though it's not like he'd be able to dodge an incoming arrow at point blank or defend himself from several knife attacks at once. He more so uses it as a means to dodge and flee as it really doesn't give him much advantage for fighting. In short ; He can process and react to events around him very quickly, though he wouldn't be fast enough to outmatch other people in terms of speed because of this, also close quarter attacks are more difficult for him to manage as it is more difficult to visualize.
    • Creative mindset : The Ithanian is more of an intellectual than a fighter to be completely honest, He could never become great with weapons as he purely doesn't have the strength for it and he views it as too crude for his dignity. He would be pretty easily overpowered in terms of strength and hand to hand except for his vampiric defense capabilities and reactive speed. His mind is very creative and he has little trouble with coming up with clever jokes, philosophies, and stories. He would slowly build it up as he went along and he is also good at thinking outside the box. Archard is a good artist and specializes in portraits of faces. He also plays the piano which he practiced since he was six. His mother was very ambitious of him, wanting him to know all sorts of arts and tricks to best impress his peers and other Ithanian nobility to gain a good name for himself eventhough he started to practice it less and less as he began practicing his magic.
    Weaknesses
    • Kidney failures : The Ithanian began a strange habit a few years ago in which he began consuming smaller amounts of perfume to mask the smell of blood in his breath, it soon turned to a freakish addiction however, this causes him to occasionally overload his kidneys, having painful kidney failures that feature symptoms like, severe headache, throwing up and bad nausea. To counter this he carries a bottle of grounded ruby flower mixed with milk and lady's shine to ease the pain, heal his kidneys and also destroy the poison that would appear in his blood streams. If he had a kidney failure he would have to consume the potion, five times a day.

    • Weak arms : As previously mentioned, his arms are the weakest points of his body, being only as strong as a fit 14 year old's, he is easily overpowered even by some women and he isn't much of a match for anyone when it comes to raw power. He also has the previously mentioned injury in his shoulders making more physically demanding tasks such as lifting heavy objects, pushing and climbing difficult and painful.

    • Low Endurance : Being in his current social and financial status, he doesn't care much for working out, as a result he has gained a very low endurance and cannot keep up any challenging for very long periods of time. His conditioning isn't the best either and his running style would seem very inexperienced, while this weakness "could" be trained away, he simply is too lazy and doesn't care to do so. This is also why when fighting or attempting to subdue people.. Well whatever. He'd deal in quick attack bursts and not prolonged degradation of the enemies defenses as he simply couldn't endure it.


    • Archard has a weird habit and addiction of consuming smaller doses of perfume. He also interrupts and talks faster if people are getting in on his personality and origins, a matter he doesn't like to discuss. He also licks his lips when nervous or reading up from a book or doing a speech. Other than that he has none. ( I might add some I come up with or he develops during Rp))

    • During the first fifteen years of his life he was taught in various hobbies and practice skills that was fit for an upper-class gentleman. As a result he got really good at things such like art, philosophy, Piano, geography, and other intellectual skills that were common for most nobility and upper-class families to have (Language, Grammatics, writing, etc.)

    • Ever since he could walk, Archard has had an affection for music. Specifically piano music, but he learned the overall principles of music and node writing. He can play seven diffrent pieces with closed eyes and can read nodes almost like letters. His sleight hands and long and slender fingers also making it easier for him to reach the keys with less hand movement.

    LIKES :

    • Music: As previously mentioned, Archard adores music and is his most frequent hobby. When playing his music or listening to it he almost seems completely diffrent from his usual, arrogant and deceptive self. It is a feeling that he doesn't truly know where comes from but it was because his REAL mother used to sing and play for him.

    • Perfume : Once again as previously mentioned, The Ithanian has a liking of perfume and a strange habit of consuming it in smaller doses to mask the smell of blood in his stomach and as a remedy of pleasure and satisfactory as he has grown addicted to the horrendously bitter taste.

    • Te'suik/ Vampires in general : Archard enjoys the company of other vampires, especially other Te'suik whom are the only people he considers somewhat equal to himself. But other vampires like Quel'Ess and Dra'lonais are also a good source of conversation and he is more likely to gain affection for them.


    DISLIKES :
    • Peasents : Archard heavily frowns upon the filthy lower classes of Aloria, among them the slave races such as Tigrans and Songaskia. The main reason is most likely their filthiness and that he considers them the most inferior to him of all classes. If a filthy or ragged peasant came up to him he would be more likely to completely ignore them, not acknowledging their existence at all. Exceptions are when they become a part of his act, though he'd never even consider drinking from them or touching them out of free will.

    • The Emperor : Archard absolutely loathes the Emperor as he is viewed as superior to all others. Simply the fact that so many people believe this is true and so many people consider the Emperor superior alone, bugs him. Each time he'd see or hear the name of the Emperor he'd frown in disgust. It can ruin his unionist facade at times but if people ask, he tends to just brush it off on an itch or sore back.

    • Loosing : As one could imagine, Archard is a very sore looser, at times even a worse winner, but if he should loose a game of chess for an example or a bet, he would likely become very grumpy and at sometimes even angry. He'd complain and blame his loss on other reasons than his own lack of skill.

    Friends :
    • Kristoph van Vitchen @Kosen : A fellow te'suik that he often congregates with for refreshments, dinners, and schemes. Archard naturally feels a bit competetive of him but otherwise he is one of the people he gets along with the best.
    • Bram Eversnow @BrammekeH : Archard was introduced to this elf a while ago by Kristoph with some underground buissnes. He grew to take a liking of him especially after he sustained him in his time in Fort Kronau. Without him providing him blood, he would have had to kill someone, most likely blowing his cover.
    • Ztril Merrit @Eyrok : Whilst not really official "friends", Archard definetly likes him more than most people as he has several times provided help and medicine for his organ problems. He met him a bit prior to the Dark Queen's take over.
    • Teresa Grimald @hetalianpasta : Another Te'suik lass he was introduced to by Kristoph, he is currently still a bit suspecious of her and doesn't dare to get too involved with her until he knows her better, however he is definetly intrigued by her charme.
    Neutral :
    • None yet
    Enemies :
    • Apart from the government and a few state officals. None yet.

    Life Story...

    Archard was born the 262 AC the tenth of April into a poor beggar family on the Ithanian countryside. His father had died a few months prior to his birth and he only had his mother and older brother. It seemed that the cute little two year old had become a trump card for them, he would either pretend to have lost his mother and lead helpful citizens into ambushes and they were paid a little bit by some assassins to help lure in their targets. The boy was very intelligent and could speak decent Ithanian approaching his early three years, during this time his sadistic and sinister personality developed. One day however, after he had reached the age of three, they messed with the wrong bunch and a group of gang members came to their camp in the forest, not far from the town. His mother fled with Archard whilst his brother attempted to fight them off. She came upon an orphanage in the nearest town, still in close pursuit by the gang that had killed his brother. There she left him at the doorstep and said her final goodbyes before sprinting off, drawing the grunts away...

    For almost three years he lived in the orphanage under a strict eye by the stereotypical, maliciously cruel head mistress. He was a very disliked child and received many punishments for his acts. He had a habit of luring children in to ambushes by the bullies of the place and pickpocket even the caretakers as he had been raised to do. Then one day a pair of high-class Ithanian folks came to adopt a child. They were all told to stand in an orderly line and look their most presentable. However Archard arrived with scruff hair, stained clothes and a dirty face and when the man and woman passed about the line to inspect the children they did not as much as offer him a glance, exactly what he had hoped for. As the noble man passed him he managed to get his hand on a golden pocket watch, smugly sneaking it down his pocket. The pair was about to leave, disappointed that there had been no worthy orphans and he went to check the time. He noticed his missing watch and turned on his heel as he trotted down the line again, yelling "Whoever turns in the child who stole my watch will be coming with us!" A loud buzz of mumbling broke out as the children began looking at each other, asking if they'd seen. But no one else than Archard knew, and so it was that he raised his hand. "You?! Who was it then?!" To this he merely replied "Me." and held up the pocket watch. After moment of deadly glares, silence, and suspense the man broke into laughter "Hahahah, This certaintly is a funny one isn't it?" Padded his head as the mistress apologized time upon time, preaching of the punishments she'd give him The man merely waved her off "No need for any of that. We'll take him. What is his name?" The mistress stood dumbstruck for a moment before answering. "Archard..."

    A few years passed as he gradually grew more arrogant by the week. He was showered in riches he had never even known existed and introduced to an entirely different culture. He was taught manners and etiquette along with getting home schooled by his mother and scholars brought in from across the empire. On his fourteenth birthday they went to a meeting in the small Te'suik group that was established in the city and he witnessed one of the members, torturing a slave with his blood magic for essential practice. This peeked Archard's interest as he had never seen something so satisfying to his sadistic needs as this and immediately begged his mother and father to force the man to teach him. The other member, called Bernard VlaeciƩ merely giggled, claiming that this would then be his fourteenth birthday present to the boy and soon began his training. His parents had introduced him to drinking blood around the age of seven and he had grown used to the taste and consistency even though he was not a vampire yet. The occasional screams from the cellar provided Archard with plenty imaginative material and he enjoyed watching, painting, sketching, and drawing the gory scenery that took place as they drained their victims entirely and stored the bottles in the wine stand. It wasn't long before he was taken to the cellar to practice blood magic, learning how to put the blood into stasis and how to induce those horrible screams he had grown to appreciate so much. He was around seventeen years old when he began dabbling into shadow magic alongside his studies on blood magic. He had come across an interesting tome in his fathers library that contained details and history concerning it and so it was that Archard begun his second form of void magic. Being the spoiled brat he was, his family immediately began searching the underground for shadow mages to teach him and thought it took awhile, they soon found an old thief Shendar called Galmar to teach him. Archard was trained a lot in particularly moving blind, after one year of practice he would spend his entire day in the blind and whilst he didn't do much in his everyday anyway, he maneuvered his way around his home with little to none toe-stubbing or head-hitting. To this day he enjoys getting to know a certain area and then try his best to walk it, eyes closed and using his perceptive strength to recall smaller details around that particular area.
    Upon his twenty fifth birthday, his father took him to an unknown part of the basement, using a secret passage behind the wine stand (Super original.. I know -_-) That lead them into some sort of crypt. Waiting for them was about ten other masked noble men, apparently all Te'suik. There was a table in the middle with a bowl and upon his father initiating the introduction ritual, all the guests came up and donated a bit of their own blood. Eventually the bowl would be full and his father gestured him to drink up. As a result Archard was turned Te'suik...


    About five years later, he got into a heated argument with his parents. He had gotten a girlfriend and accidentally revealed his true colors to her. The lass had unfortunately ran off screaming and the townsfolk were planning an inquisition of the family. All of their Te'suik friends had abandoned them and their only hope was to escape. But Archard had other plans. He grabbed a steel blade from a stand in the living room, sneaking into the living room where his father was back turned, and his mother on the balcony. He pierced his father heart from behind with the tip, killing his father instantly. He then continued onto the balcony, where his mother turned to him with a smile, the smile fading a bit as she saw the blood spatter all over him. The towns folk were gathering in front of the house, torches and blades and they could hear angry chants "Tuer le buveur de sang!" Translating to kill the blood drinkers. A sinister smile appeared on Archards lips as he went to kick his mother, Sparta-style, off the balcony and into the cheering crowd before turning to leap out the window himself, landing in a tree, disappearing into the dark woods. Archard came to watch the burning of his mother, sketching the event, a drawing he would always keep on him. After that he left town, hurrying to the nearest dock as he set out for Regalia where he would continued to live for the next nine years until present day...
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    Feel free to leave any peer reviews or things I might've missed :D
     
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    TutiDias General Vladislav Marknid

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    This is really nice. :)

    I like to see Te'suiks getting played.
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    Oh. I thought it said he was 6'6. whoopsie
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    Eh.. It's been awhile and my review hasn't even started yet. If @Lord_Immortal isn't up for reviewing it could you maybe get someone else @LumosJared ?? I'm just really eager to start roleplaying him. Apologies if this is a bother.
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    I'm gonna bump this char sheet once again, and I think the prefix for it broke or something when doing a few edits.. Please review this soon @Lord_Immortal or find another one to do it @LumosJared I'm getting a bit tired of my application being ignored. Atleast that is what it feels like. It's been a literal 20 days since you assigned my sheet and nothing has obviously happened. :(
     
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    I want to see that char soon :(
     
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    I'll be reviewing this sheet.
    1. Remove the vampire sub-sections
    2. Remove the Actor strength.
    3. Rework the Low Endurance weakness or Sprinter strength as the two still seem to contradict each other.
    4. Remove the Near Sighted weakness as this is unlikely to be played out IC.
    5. Character height is above average for the race and culture, fix this.
    Make these changes in BLUE and tag me when you are done.
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    THANK YOU and I will get straight to it !!!
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    Alright SO!

    • I removed all of the Vampire sub sections (Eventhough I was proud of them ;-;)
    • I removed the actor strength (Though I'd love an explanation to exactly why it had to be removed?)
    • I decided to replace the Sprinter Strength alltogether, adding in Reflexes instead.
    • I removed the near sighted weakness as per request.
    • The last remains untouched as the max height for Citoyen is 6,2 foot and Archards is only 6 foot.
    I hope this is suffecient, if not. Please don't hesitate to ask me to remove further things. @Walrusaur_

    Best regards ^-^
     
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    Walrusaur_ Force of Chaos

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    Apologies about the height, I skimmed over this quickly so I read it as 6 foot 6. The I requested you remove the actor strength as that could be used as a way to avoid acting out certain traits. Approved.
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    YEEEEYYY!!!!!
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    TutiDias General Vladislav Marknid

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    YEEEEE CONRATS LOOK FORWARD FOR SEEIN' YA!!!
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    Needs re-approval!
    I did some changes to the app. The changes are marked in RED but I'll include a small list for you below :D
    • Reduced "Touch of the void" to student level and "Sanguine Thirst" to caster level.
    • Included mage level shadow magic in the sub-school "Shadow meld"
    • Included a patch in the lifestory that details how he came across and learned it.
    • Aged archard up to 47 years old to make the time and magic fit better.
    • Removed strength "Blood magic" as that is self-explanatory and not needed.
    • Replaced it^^ with "Perceptive".
    • Removed "Fearless" trait.
    • Replaced it^^ with "OCD"
    • Also going to add relations part once I get the names right of all the peepz.
    @Walrusaur_
     
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    Walrusaur_ Force of Chaos

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    Approved.
     
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    ScaledSupremacy No, no, I'm just a... reverse blood donor.

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    I think the approved thingy flew it's way off this sheet? @Walrusaur_
     
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