Rejected Sheet Alastair Mac Conall

Discussion in 'Character Applications' started by Farly108, Aug 19, 2020.

  1. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    [​IMG]
    Alastair Mac Conall - The Red Duke
    [​IMG]
    Theme - Art - Playlist
    "When I am gone. will they remember my name? Will they tell my story?"
    Battle theme - Alt Theme

    [​IMG]
    Basic Information
    • Full Name: Alastair Robert Fionn Mac Conall
      • Nicknames: Al, Ally, Gingey & Little Lion
      • Titles: Arch-Duke of Dundarne, Knight of Calemberg & Protector of the Regalian Highlands
      • Moniker: The Red Duke
    • Age: 27
      • Birthday: January 25th
      • Star Sign: Aquarius
    • Gender: Male
    • Race: Ailor
      • Lineage: Drahl
      • Culture: Dunbrae
      • Influences: Anglian., Eriunin & Caeren
    • Sexuality: Bi-Sexual
    • Preferred Weapon: Warhammer
    Basic Information
    • Religion: Alastair is a Dogatarin Unionist, he is rather devote taking time to pray and give to charity though he isnt zealous nor is he particularly good at practicing some of the tenants.
    • Core: Alastair at his core is a Leader. Be it in peace through ruling his lands or at war with either his personal forces to the Regalian Military. The man has awful trouble sitting still finding himself always wanting to move onto the next task or target. His ambition in life is to become Lord Chancellor and or earn a medal for service in the Military from the Emporer

    • Alastair has been in Regalia for some time, studying in its various academies and facing the difficulties of the troubled city. Now he has ascended to the position of a Duke, a position he has trained for his whole life. However he still remains lost admidst a political swamp that is Regalia. He navigates it well for the moment yet it remains to be seen if he will emerge.
    • Born the first of six siblings Alastair spent most of his life away from home, Dundarne was strange to him when he returned and his family stranger still. All due to the fact he grew up in various academies or on the road, even when given the opportunity to return home he usually chose instead to travel. Now he works on mending relationships and getting on his way.
    • Alastair has many different ambitions. While his main ambition for the moment is to become the Lord Chancellor of Regalia, he has many different wishes and wants. One of his main ones is mending the relationship between the Caeren and Dubrae cultures, he also wishes to found his own military school based on his upbringing and forge a new future for his people and the empire.
    • Alastair owns both a arrow head necklace and a gold-silver ring with rubys embedded in it. Both aquired from Osric Howlester and the Howling forges as prizes in a raffle.
    • Alastair owns a large leather-bound journal that is constantly kept with him either in the care of a servant or inside his coat.
    • Alastair has a pendant depicting Caeren and Dunbrae symbols including geeps and black bears.
    • Alastair carries a pouch usually containing upwards of 100 regals
    • Alastair carries an engraved silver pocketwatch with a golden chain attached at his hip.
    [​IMG]
    "Madness, Madness and Stupidity" - Tywin Lannister
    Skill Information
    50 + 10H (6 unspent)

    • Two Handed Blunt: 8
    • Strength Training: 10
    • Construction Art: 15(10+hsII)
    • Linguistics: 9(HSI)
    • Gardening Art: 5
    • Dancing Art: 2
    • Husbandry Art: 10H
    Mutations - Afflictions & Abilities
    Abilities
    Destined Body 1
    Honed Skill II
    Honed Skill I
    Mutations
    N/A

    Infection - Von Kerle - Inactive
    Base Abilities - Here
    Form Abilities - Here

    Form - In his vampire form Alastair's skin becomes a glowing Silver except for his face which remains its usual colour. His hair grows longer and seems to almost float not as if it were not affected by gravity. His hair takes on the appearance of dark red fire moving and flowing, as two Silver Horns sprout from his head and up towards the sky. Alastair seems to grow slightly bulkier with his skin appearing almost metallic.
    [​IMG]
    Body Stat:
    • Body Stat: 30
    • Calculation: St(10) + THB(8) + GA(3) + DA(2) + PA(2) + 5(DB1)
    • Body Stat: Muscular
    • Body Fat: Average Body Fat
    Languages:
    • Common: 9/10
    • Godelic: 7/10
    • Breizh: 6/10
    • Innis: 6/10
    • Pach: 7/10
    • Calemberger: 6/10
    • High Anglian: 7/10
    [​IMG]
    "Some cause happiness whenever they go, others whenever they go." - Oscar Wilde
    Visual Information
    • Eye Colour: Deep Blue
    • Hair Colour: Deep Red
    • Hair Style: Long and Flowing
    • Skin Colour: Pale with a light tan
    • Clothings: Fineries, Kiltachs or Armour
    • Height: 6ft2
    • Face: Alastair has a decent looking face with high cheekbones usually plastered with a smile or laugh. He has full red lips with a strong jawline usually bare of any hair. He has haunting pale blue eyes and a large if slim nose. He has two scars, one right on his chin and one on the edge of his mouth both obtained from fighting vampires.
    • Body: Alastair is a tall lanky individual, muscular and well defined muscles from years spent training at arms. He can usually be found with many bruises or cuts on his body from various fights or spars. The only noticeable feature is a scar running down his back from his shoulder blade to his hip.
    • Fashion: Alastair can usually be found wearing reds, greens and blues.He alternates cloths usually twice daily depending. The first half of the day he will always spend in a Kiltach and more casual clothing such as just a standard tunic. He then alternated between trousers jackets and kiltachs and more fancy wear. The only exception is when he wears his military or marshal cabinet uniform.
    • Voice: Alastair alternates accent, when in the capital and amoung the nobility he speaks in a mix of his Dunbrae and Anglian accents. When amount those he cares for or people he is comfortable with his voice becomes much rougher becoming the usual mix with more Caeren mixed in. Voice Claim - Ewan Magregor
    [​IMG]
    Personality
    Character Alignment: Neutral Good
    Personality Type: Campaigner (ENTJ)

    Natharia Mac Conall - 6/10
    Finnidh Mac Conall - 5/10
    Cillian Gallagher - 7/10
    • Unsure - Alastair is often unsure of himself and his abilities leading to him often second guessing himself. This is applicable in most non-stressful situations and often keeps him up at night. The only instance this doesn't shine through in is high stress situations where he always strives to be sure of himself. However he will still question himself after the fact regarding his decisions and the consequences.
    • Sloth - Alastair has lofty ideals and does not lack in imagination, but when it comes to actively doing stuff he is often slothful and lazy. It is usually from lack of motivating factors as often Alastair finds it hard to get himself going. This can often negatively impact him and lead him into self defeating cycles.
    • Envious - Alastair though he tries hard to hide it is an envious person especially of those he dislikes. He sees what others have and wants it, while he is often happy for his friends and their achievements there is that little shard of envy. Alastair often finds it hard to cope with people doing better than him but he has had to live with it.
    • Quirks - Alastair has a number of quirks he has developed over many years. The most obvious one is the fact that when he is sitting down and is not being mentally engaged he will often tap his foot or fidget with his legs and hands subconsciously. Another thing he does is he often moves his tongue about when he has to think about things deeply.
    • Skills - Skills Alastair has that he would not be considered proficient in include Mixology and Cooking, these are just basic things he is not the best at but he can do. With mixology Alastair has a talent for mixing alcoholic drinks together and getting the best taste. In cooking Alastair is known though he does not do it often to make a brilliant sandwich.
    • Knights & Rangers - Alastair wished as a child that he would become a knight or a Regalia Ranger. Though that was not the path he would walk in life, Alastair still has a great appreciation for knights and rangers doing everything he can do to further their goals and assist them.
    • Rum & Vodka - Alastair though he usually drinks Whiskey, Ale and Wine he has a great almost secret love of Rum and Vodka. They are his favourite things to drink though he feels as though he has to hide this as they are not traditional highlander or Anglian drinks. However he keeps a small store of luxury rum and vodka in his room.
    • Hiking - Alastair likes to escape to the countryside oftentimes going up the mountains to clear his head. He the highlands to be very peaceful so when he returns home after any business is concluded he often will go into the wilds for a few days to be at peace.
    • Fighting - Alastair doesn't necessarily like fighting. What he really loves is the adrenaline rush. Alastair is something of and Adrenaline junkie seeking out dangerous situations that can get his blood pumping. This has lead to him becoming skilled at dealing with dangerous situations.
    • Sendrassians - Alastair has a deep hatred for Sendrass and Sendrassians in general infact he dreams of burning the whole continent one day. This is due to the Sendrass war and the pain the conflict caused to not only him but many in the highlands through loss of life. As such Alastair hates the void cursed lizards.
    • Inconsistency - Alastair has a strong dislike for people who are inconsistent and inconsiderate of others. While he would like many people to improve he also likes to be able to predict what people will do and how they will react in certain situations.
    • Unearned Entitlement - Alastair is an entitled individual as many are but he believes he earns this through his loyal service to his people and the empire. What Alastair hates is those who act entitled or arrogant and yet provide nothing and do nothing for either the state or the empire in general.
    • Disloyalty - ?
    Animals:
    Domesticated pet - Ceardian Long Talon - Redfrick
    Mount - Silvershale - Arthair

    [​IMG]
    "Go now my son, do unto the world what you will. But never lose yourself in your actions."
    Life Story
    • Birth
    • Child
    • Adult
    • Regalia
    Progression Talent
    Warrior - 1(Forced)
    General - 2


    Alastair after his fathers death became the head of House Mac Conall.
    Alastair Joined the marshal cabinet.
    Alastair was commissioned as a Field General.
    Alastair was commissioned as a Field Marshal.
    The Vampire Crisis began.
    Alastair joined the survivors at Calvonth.
    Alastair rescued Duke Fabien Cadieux from the city.
    Alastair dueled Field Marshal Reimar of Calemberg to a stalemate x 2.
    Alastair was infected with his Von Kerle Vampirism reawakening after a long fight with Haeddi van Hal
    Alastair dueled both Lyall Howlester and Leopold von Schwartzkrau
     
    • Winner Winner x 7
    • Powerful Powerful x 2
    • Like Like x 1
    #1 Farly108, Aug 19, 2020
    Last edited: Feb 13, 2022
  2. Wumpatron

    Wumpatron Das Wump Staff Member Lore1
    1. House von Drachenburg

    Joined:
    Dec 15, 2015
    Messages:
    2,717
    Likes Received:
    429
    Hello @Farly108 I will be your reviewer today.

    Everything looks sound safe for the Life Story. I can accept the tutor to teach them Leutz-Vixe though after that things get a bit complicated. At 14 they have to start their training as a Bloodcast Knight and as such cannot have gone to a Tenpenny School. After that it wouldn't be possible to be a Bloodcast Knight and attend the School of Marshalry as both take up large portions of a characters life forcing them to choose between one or the other, you can still attend, but you would have to give up the character being a Bloodcast Knight. The choice is yours.

    Make the appropriate edits in a color of your choice and tag myself once completed.
     
  3. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
  4. Wumpatron

    Wumpatron Das Wump Staff Member Lore1
    1. House von Drachenburg

    Joined:
    Dec 15, 2015
    Messages:
    2,717
    Likes Received:
    429
  5. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron
    No rush on this one, take your time and good luck with the workload
    Just proficiency points updated is all
    as a note general tactics is listed however this character is not used in progs
    That is there to represent what the character is capable of
     
    • Like Like x 1
  6. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron removed dagger combat, adjusted sword and left the 10 points gained to be used through IC learning
     
  7. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
  8. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron Complete character rewrite and rework and inclusion of incharacter learning and stuff also major backstory changes and an age up from 22 to 26 to facilitate all the aspects i wana cover with the intent to transfer this character to my main also did a lot of IC learning that's been incorporated into backstory
     
    #8 Farly108, Nov 4, 2020
    Last edited: Nov 4, 2020
  9. Wumpatron

    Wumpatron Das Wump Staff Member Lore1
    1. House von Drachenburg

    Joined:
    Dec 15, 2015
    Messages:
    2,717
    Likes Received:
    429
    • Your Physical Stat calculation is off, you have 13 Blades, not 15 as you put in your math, please correct this.
    • Other than that everything checks out, just remember our discussion we had previously of being a career knight ahead of anything else.
    • I'll mark you off as approved, just fix your math and give this post a rating so I know we're all set.
    @Farly108
     
    • Like Like x 1
  10. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron
    New Knight Lore came out and it was exactly what I wanted for the character.
    So I took the opportunity to completely overhaul the sheet.
    The Lifestory has been basically torn to shreds and replaced.
    A lot a lot more information has been added.
    Relationships will be added as they develop in role-play.
    Basically everything needs a re review so I hope you enjoy the read.
     
  11. Wumpatron

    Wumpatron Das Wump Staff Member Lore1
    1. House von Drachenburg

    Joined:
    Dec 15, 2015
    Messages:
    2,717
    Likes Received:
    429
  12. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron
    Updated with proficiency update and just generally overhauled once more
     
  13. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron Going to bump since its been a week.
     
  14. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
  15. Wumpatron

    Wumpatron Das Wump Staff Member Lore1
    1. House von Drachenburg

    Joined:
    Dec 15, 2015
    Messages:
    2,717
    Likes Received:
    429
    @Farly108 the only major discrepancy is that as a Bloodcast Knight they cannot enroll in any other education until they graduate, which impacts much of how you have the character designed. So the option is yours to have them remain a knight or to have their education background, I leave that to you. Tag myself once you come to your decision.
     
  16. Farly108

    Farly108 Lanky Leg Extraordinaire

    Joined:
    Mar 28, 2020
    Messages:
    169
    Likes Received:
    63
    @Wumpatron
    decision made, sheet overhauled accordingly
     
  17. Wumpatron

    Wumpatron Das Wump Staff Member Lore1
    1. House von Drachenburg

    Joined:
    Dec 15, 2015
    Messages:
    2,717
    Likes Received:
    429
  18. cosmoons

    cosmoons lewis Supremium

    Joined:
    Aug 20, 2021
    Messages:
    122
    Likes Received:
    42
    I ran into him on the street and didn't give a second thought lmao
     

Share This Page