Approved Sheet Adrian Marillia

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Are Monzon the most fashionable knightly order?

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  1. Heraberry

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    "I remember when a dream was just a dream
    Aching to believe, empty hands, no stone to throw."

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    • Basic Information || the self-made man
      • ≺ [ Full Name: Celebriän Dalore Marillia ]
        • 〈Nicknames: 'Adrian', 'Wittle Horn'
      • ≺ [ Age: 31]
        • 〈Birthday: October 27th, 278〉
        • 〈Star Sign: Scorpio〉
      • ≺ [ Gender: Male ]
        • 〈Pronouns: He/Him
      • ≺ [ Race: Maraya ]
        • 〈Subrace: El〉
      • ≺ [ Sexuality: Bisexual ]
      • ≺ [ Eye Color: Pale Yellow]
    • Inventory Information || pocket change
      • WIP
    • Core Concept || a blossom of lavender
      • Adrian Marillia is primarily agnostic, still following the teachings of Tohn Sona, though he is well-aware of the existence of deities, having no deity he generously reveres or dedicates himself to.
      • Adrian Marillia is an eccentric, self-praising engineer with an envious heart and a greedy mind, constantly using his skills to improve his image or weigh his pockets down.
    • Skill Information || tools of the trade
      • ≺ [ Total Points|| 50 Main Points + 10 Hobby Points]
        • 〈Main Points〉
          • Spear Combat Skill: 5 Points {5 Main Points}
          • Bodycare Training Skill: 5 Points {5 Main Points}
          • Vocal Art Skill: 5 Points {5 Main Points}
          • Linguistics Training Skill: 6 Points {6 Main Points}
          • Mixology Art Skill: 4 Points {4 Main Points}
          • Husbandry Art Skill: 10 Points {10 Main Points}
        • 〈Hobby Points〉
          • Glass Art Skill: 15 Points {10 Hobby Points + Racial Boost }
        • 〈Point-Buy Traits〉
          • ≺ [ Engineering: 12 Points ]
            • Engineering Pack One: Environment: 3 Points {3 Main Points}
            • Engineering Pack Two: Mending: 3 Points {3 Main Points}
            • Engineering Pack Eight: Familiar: 3 Points {3 Main Points}
            • Engineering Pack Nine: Hacking: 3 Points {3 Main Points}
          • ≺ [Metallurgy: 3 Points ]
            • Finecraft Metallurgy: 3 Points {3 Main Points}
        • ≺ [ Physical Stat: 9 Points ]
        • ≺ [ Body Shape: Average]
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    • Special Traits || arbitration advantages
      • ≺ [ Metallurgy ]
      • 〈Finecraft Metallurgy〉
      • ≺ [ Engineering ]
      • 〈Engineering Pack One: Environment〉
      • 〈Engineering Pack Two: Mending〉
      • 〈Engineering Pack Eight: Familiar〉
      • 〈Engineering Pack Nine: Hacking〉
      • ≺ [ Animal Husbandry ]
      • 〈Domestic Pet: Grand Papillon〉
      • 〈Progression Mount: Enferena〉
      • ≺ [ Affliction Traits ]
      • 〈Dorkarth Bloodline〉
        • Dormant
    • Languages || crucial conversations
      • ≺ [ Common {Birth Language | Fluent}]
      • ≺ [ Modern Altalar {Birth Language | Fluent}]
      • ≺ [ Daendroquin {Learned Language | Fluent}]
      • ≺ [ Shalota {Learned Language | Fluent}]
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    • Visual Information || appearances matter
      • Adrian holds the marks of the Void's influence on his skin and face, his hair a writhing mass of lavender tentacles, and his cheek holding an Asha-claw mark, usually hidden with make-up.
      • Standing at 6'1", Adrian Marillia has a masculine, sculpted body dotted with scars from battles long past. His hair is lavender and does not have a specific style as it moves too often, though it extends down to waist height.
      • Adrian's vampiric shift, "Illithinae", is a tall, mollusk-like being cloaked in a black hood. Its skin is dark-grey and sickly, always wetted with ooze and muck. A mass of tentacles, formed from the man's hair, forms over a circular hole above his mouth. The claws on its fingers are blackened and talon-shaped, and his legs are replaced with multiple, squirming tendrils.
        • Think a DnD Mindflayer/Illithid.
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    "This is my show, baby
    And it's all about me."

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    • Life Story || a story rarely told
      • ≺ [ Childhood ]
        • Adrian knows very little about his past, assumed to be one of the many Maraya disowned away by parents ridden with poverty, but would date his birth on October 27th, 278; the day he emerged from his egg. Growing up separated from the Home Swarm in the care of two, Teledden Altalar, his hatching occurring before he could perish as a fanciful trinket in a cabinet. His “parents” didn’t care much for the young boy, simply hiring tutors and trying to ease him into a life of more refined living for most of his earlier years.
      • ≺ [ Adolescence ]
        • Adrian stood as a clever boy surrounded by yes-men, all doting on him with an intrigue for expedience. He studied under many Lesarra servants within the many Teledden-led families of the outer, agricultural areas. Often he found enjoyment in chemistry and religious studies in the Faith in Estel and Unionist seminary. His life would change when he came across a fellow El-Maraya in the market stalls one day. Enamored with his kin, he began to study under the man during the day, much to the chagrin of his now neglected tutors. It was through this connection that he would come to learn much about the creation of perfumes, much to the delight of his finer, El-Maraya senses, as well as glassblowing. Soon enough, his skills would garner the attention of a traveling band of Tohnborn, eager for trade. With this, the young boy would say goodbye to his parents and depart for Tohn Maar Zintheer.
      • ≺ [Early Adulthood]
        • The changing seasons brought to the growing man the flickers of adulthood, wisps of hair upon his cheeks, his body growing lanky with height. His time within the Tohn Maar Zintheer was spent conducting working with the crystal tech groups. Moreover, he began to engage in artistic and cultural studies, going as far as to tame his own Enferena, during this expansive time. Most of all, however, he began to understand the teachings of Tohn Sona, though he understood it more as a natural philosophy than a religion. After many years, he would depart from the Tohn for good, bringing his skills in tow. It was not long into his adulthood that he came into the eye of the Azure Order for the study of history and magic. It promised work and Adrian would find his talents and charm put to the test in tracking undocumented oddities. His work brought to his head new ideas that only swelled with his parents' instilled values. Finding work in tracking slaves and mages, the man was enriched with blood money that weighted his pockets...
      • ≺ [ Advanced Years ]
        • Alexander I's decree on the rights of mages ended his career quickly, though not before he had earned his fair share. Eagerly, he returned home; showing off his wealth and momentos, from his time hunting mages and from within the Tohn, with pride and filled with the exciting thoughts that his parents, slavers themselves, would finally see him. Though, when he returned into the manor, he discovered that his parents had scarcely noticed his absence. Even his siblings could only scoff at the choice of engineering with anything other than Magitech, as well as his, frankly, hideous mount. Infuriated, he left his family’s estate and threw himself into his work. He would work under many bosses throughout his time in Daen, helping to assert his reliability. He often worked in Skyborn communes, traveling the whole of Daen on his Enferena.
      • ≺ [ Bound for Regalia... ]
        • Adrian's decision to move to Regalia was motivated by a desire to learn more of the world, having long since grown tired of Daen. With a wanderlust-filled heart, he would seek wealth within the city if it may impress his family further and restore dignity to his name...
    • Progression Information || time carved applications
      • Engineering: 2 {Forced}
      • Support: 1 {Spent}
     
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    #1 Heraberry, Aug 18, 2021
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  2. Heraberry

    Heraberry The Best Narcissist

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    Credit to @Qoll for their assistance with this document's aesthetics with their exceptional guide!
     
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    Claimed for review.​
     
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    @Heraberry Please remove the descriptions of your abilities. They fill far too much space and are unnecessary for the application. You can have them saved to an external document if you need them for easy reference.
     
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    Moved all racials/traits/etc. into a spoiler for ease-of-use!
     
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    @fantuinn

    8/27/21 Change!
    Changed 8 points of Light Ranged into 8 Points shielding!
     
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    @fantuinn

    9/12/21 Changes
    • Added Dorkarth and Von Kerle Bloodlines under the abilities tabs! (Twiceborn)
    • Changed 5 Dagger Combat Skill to Fist Combat skill!
    Thank you!

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    Heraberry The Best Narcissist

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    It's time for....

    9/20/21 Changes and hopefully the last technical changes until after this event.
    • Replaced 8 Shielding with With 12 Warlash
    • Changed 10 Sword Combat to 11
    • Purchased 3 Points in Linguistics
    • Purchased 5 Points in Writing Art
    • Removed Element Brand 5
    • Remove Magic Bolt 1
    • All mentions of the Monzon Order have been replaced with the Parthas Order to better fit Adrian's character.
    • Aged Adrian down to 31 from 48
    • Minor backstory rewrite for change above.

    I do not know how to close the vote please help.

    Thank you!
     
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    @Heraberry Hello! Claiming this for review:

    Everything checks out. Approved.
     
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  12. Heraberry

    Heraberry The Best Narcissist

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    Well, I was wrong.

    It is time for...

    10/7/21 Changes
    • Altered proficiencies to better balance out combat skills and remove unused skills that I could never incorporate into RP. Thank you @Winterless for the suggestion of keeping CRP proficiency investments under 25 points in total.
      • Changed Racial Boost to Warlash Combat Skill
      • Changed Warlash investment from 12 to 8
      • Changed Swords investment from 11 to 10
      • Removed Glass Art, replaced with Sailing Art (with backstory changes to fit this point alterations)
      • Remove Finecraft Metallurgy
      • Removed Engraving Metallurgy
      • Changed Linguistics investment from 3 to 9 to keep languages lost during Linguistics Update (9/25/21) with room to learn one extra language in future.
      • 10 points left over for future tutoring roleplay scenarios.
    • Altered Twiceborn permission
      • Changed Von Kerle Bloodline to Milot to better suit the character's personality and to palette my growing distaste for drawn-out combat roleplay sessions.

    Thank you!

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    You must invest at least 10 core points in a proficiency to be able to use your racial boost. This would make your warlash 15. Please correct this and tag me when you are done. @Heraberry
     
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    • The requested change has been made!
      • Warlash Investment changed from 8 to 10 from the free-point pool to receive a racial boost.
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    Approved.
     
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    Heraberry The Best Narcissist

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    It's time for...

    11/9/21 Changes

    • The Document has been edited to comply with the new format including Progression information
    • Proficiency Shifts
      • Replaced Sword & Warlash Skills with Spear and Dagger proficiency.
      • Glass Art Invested into and applied with Racial Boost.
      • Added Mixology Art Skill.
      • Invested 5 points more into Bodycare (totalling 10)
      • Removed 3 Points from Linguistics.
      • Changed learned language of Etos to Girobaldan.
    • Edited Adrian to be a Bloodcast Knight to fit with the coming Knight Update and the removal of the Parthas Order.
      • Backstory rewrites to fit this change.
    • Addition of Progression Information
    All changes have been made in GREEN!

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    Re-approved.
     
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    Heraberry The Best Narcissist

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    [@Acosmism]
    A new Maraya update came out and you know what that means...

    Major 12/7/21 Update!
    • Removed Knighthood Entirely!
      • I very rarely utilized the niche that knights are supposed to fill in the city and, thus, did not feel it right to keep the character as one.
        • The backstory has been changed to show this.
    • Proficiency Update!
      • Removed Dagger Combat Skill
      • Removed Writing Art Skill
      • Decreased Body Care Training Skills from 10 to 5
      • Decreased Spear Combat Skill from 13 to 5
      • Added Vocal Art Skill
      • Added Husbandry Art Skill
      • Added 4 Engineering Packs
      • Changed 2nd Linguistics language from Girobaldan to Shalota
      • Special traits added to show additions...
    • Adrian is now a believer in Tohn Sona, though to a lesser extent than many Maraya on account of being Skyborn.
    • Updated progression talents.
     
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    Re-approved.
     
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