Spoiler Basic Information (Required) Full Name: A'eollaja Ello'janna Age: 167 Gender: Female Race: Saivale Kathar Skill Information Points: 60/60 +12 magic points (+12 from proficiency) +10 Pole Combat (+10 from proficiency) +10 Unarmed Combat (+10 from proficiency) +5 Linguistics Knowledge (+5 from proficiency) Middle Altalar +10 Athletic Training (+10 from proficiency) +8 Magical Knowledge (+8 from proficiency) Dimenthism Artefactism +15 Musical Arts (+10 Hobby, +5 from Proficiency) Body Shape: Physical stat: 25 Shape: Slim Body fat: Average Languages: Common Kathar Elven Middle Altalar Abilities/Spells: link Mageblood: 3 Free sorcery Spells Chaos: Stay put/Can't hold me down Chaos: Yoink Chaos: Who needs skill Scion of Want Spell Visual Information (Required) Eye Color: Red Hair Color: White Hair Style: Waist Length hair, tied back into a bun and braids, with the rest dropping freely down her back Skin Color: Albino Clothing: Furs, and loose dress fabrics, sporting a decorative collar/mask Height: 6’10 Body Build: Slim Weapon of Choice: Magic, Stave Personality and Abilities (Required) Character Alignment: Chaotic Neutral Character Personality Type: The Commander Character’s Religion: Void worship 5/10 Life Story (Required) 140 AC - 165 AC ) The Saivale was born in winter of 140 AC, A’eollaja was born to Nn’allae and Ll’ejewe Ello’janna. Naturally being born amongst the aristocratic elite and being firstborn, the Saivale was set to much tutoring and lectures as a child. At first, she was as resentful to this as any child, but eventually, she took to the lectures with grandiose improvement. She found much comfort in books as further siblings were born, holding typical contempt and rivalry for them despite being the oldest by several years. At age 8 did something truly special occur, as the Saivale‘s gift for magic began to awake. Upon this awakening, the child was quickly set to extensive tutoring and training by her Uncle, S’allewyn Ello’janna, known for his magical expertise. 166 AC - 201 AC ) The Saivale continued on with grueling lectures and study, further advancing her knowledge but yet her isolation from others. She was taught from subject to subject over the years, growing a fascination and downright obsession for knowledge and arcane study. Despite her strange isolated tendencies and growing rivalries between her siblings over responsibilities of heir, she was able to make one slow forming bond with her second brother, Mel’khor, whom of which shared a rather quiet and reserved attitude, despite a greater interest for the military. 202 AC - 221 AC ) As she progressed through the pursuit of magic and study, the Saivale tutored her own classes in Paärthalaär, featuring plenty of the same teaching methods she was taught as, and such the same she teaches with to this day. Around this time she began to become more invested in the politics of her family. Being the firstborn, she was destined to take the throne from her parents, only if she could survive her siblings’ own desires to take it from her. Her parents, at age 81, arranged a marriage between her and a lesser house, offering up Hath'aral Rijjerro as her sutor. 222 AC - 251 AC ) During this time she grew rather aggressive in her family’s political court, taking enjoyment in the politics of land holding, Alliances, and family titles amongst the Ello’janna line. Her parents were growing elderly, and concern for inheritance was growing on the rise in the court. When they passed in 249 AC, family members grew violent as more than one party wanted inheritance to the line, including her oldest brother, younger sister, and uncle/mentor. Her youngest brother alone supported her rise, and for 2 years infighting reigned, ending the lives of several other parties but A’eo and her brother. 252 AC - 307 AC ) The Saivale ruled her family’s seat for 54 years, In which time she and her only spouse produced three children, whom the Saivale had well-groomed and cared for, however, grieved when her only daughter passed away from consumption at a young age. Later years she heard discussion one mass events of magic phenomena in the east, primarily, from word of Rikkira in the empire. In 306 she gave her regent brother to hold her throne, as the Saivale was drawn to the assumed “Backwater” hermit kingdoms. Present) Downtrodden and fallen from her prior place as Sovereign of the Kathar of Regalia, A’eo sought out an answer to her woes and found it in the Herald of Power, a former servant of an Arken. Bargaining with it, it empowered her Magespark by taking a piece of it away and replacing it with some of its own Essence, forever changing her and her magic.
Sorry about the wait! Here are my edits: I'd like you to drop the D&D-style moral alignment from your Morality paragraph, since we don't adhere to that system in MassiveCraft. Other than that, this app looks good! Mark your edits in red and @tag me when you're done. Happy editing!
Changes made to spell book (Adding Doruva, Malear, and Drive to replace Ghost control, Mindflux, and curse of ages) and life story changed to accommodate this @Scribbe
Changes once more made to spellbook, life story changed to accommodate the removal of void worship powers and magic changes. @Scribbe
@Tracenator1 I noticed you mentioned things like using a bow and playing an organ in the Life Story. I'd like you to amend this, marking any edits in red, and then alert me with an @tag when you're done.
Re-review due to custom magic update. Several tweaks were made to life story and personality for being outdated to the character and development as well. @Scribbe @Percuriam
Looking at your Languages section, I'd like you to make the following edits before I re-approve your app; -Remove Imperial Elven, as this is no longer a language. -Remove Modern Elven, as this is no longer a language. Replace this with Kathar Elven Dialect. -Remove She'llaq, as this requires Kathar Ritualism points that A'eollaja does not have. @Havsbris_
@Havsbris_ short re-review, sorry about the wait; Your current Magical Investment points on the Special Perms spreadsheet are listed as 50, but here are listed as 40. Please amend the listing on the Proficiency section to match the , and make the relevant changes to A'eo's Proficiencies to make up the difference. Mark your edits in red and @tag me when you're done.
@Havsbris_ My apologies! I forgot mages can only pick sorcery spells from their own school. Tag me when you've finished correcting this.