My character's responses (color coded!): Fei Zhao had long been a dissident and longed for change, although he never really wanted to take things...
Before you do that, since this is peer review, I would like to share some constructive feedback. Physical appearance: For the most part this...
Alright then. I was guessing that something similar was already implemented. Items would still be cool.
Not sure if this is possible already, but I don't think so so I'm gonna post this. The idea that I'm proposing is simple, although I expect that...
It looks great to me, I love this character idea! Here's some feedback: - You might want to try some more negative personality traits. I know...
@Jared4242 All the edits are in blue; after reading your post I realized how overpowered I had made him. I addressed all of your points (comments...
Bumping this thread because it's been more than a week and I feel as if it's being skimmed over (not entirely sure if that's allowed found nothing...
You're doing great so far, I love the character idea! Obviously most of the info just generally needs to be beefed up or added onto, since you're...
Basic Information Yeung Xiaozhi is an 18 year old male Chi’en-Ji. Yeung was born in April 27, 285AC on a small Yang-Tzu island known as...
Somehow the formatting was lost when I posted it here, but I'll add it in when I submit it.
Whew, it's finally done! I just need some peer review from you guys before I submit it. I'm especially looking feedback for @Absinthe and...
Fei Zhao was meditating in the park when he heard soft pattering footsteps behind him. It was his apprentice, Tyran El Ghul. He fumbled with...
Alone in the park, Fei-Tzu Xunzhao would suddenly gasp in surprise at magnificent swirls of light in the sky. A peace would come upon him and he...
Oh yes, you should listen to @Wolfbat9, Myahh. xD (I know you already fixed this, just commenting on the hilariousness of this comment. @Myahh...
You might need to beef it up a little bit (specifically in traits and life story). The little cutscene in your lifestory is nice, but you may have...
After waking up in immense pain, seeing that he is in a cell with several miserable prisoners, Fei Jao takes off his blindfold and awkwardly ties...
I guess that's what I get for being blind. :/ Time to make a new character! Again...
Thank you for reviewing! I have spent quite a bit of time with this. Corrected the above -- I noticed that by adding Light Magic to my strengths,...
Basic Information Fei-Tzu Xunzhao (Fei is the family name, Tzu and Xunzhao are given names - Most Regalians know him as Fei Jao or Fei Zhao...
Oops :P. I changed my age to be more lore-compatible, but I forgot to change my parent's age. I'll fix that.
