Played Character Mila Braunbecker

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    • Mila Braunbecker was born in Büchner on the border of Osteiermark and present-day Waldmark. Her parents, Kraus and Johanna Braunbecker, were somewhat well-renowned croisse-bakers; owning a quaint bakery that catered to wealthy merchants and the like. While far from rich, the small family lived comfortable lives.
    • Once during her early years, several nights before Nachtblätter Tanznacht, the bakery witnessed an attack as a starved von Kërle broke its way in, desperate for blood. In the defense of his family, Kraus Braunbecker lost his arm as he fended off the vampire. Seconds before their deaths, a Knight of the Darkwald Order arrived and killed the beast. Having tracked it for days, the sounds of struggle had alerted the Ser Knight.
    • While they had survived the ordeal, Kraus was no longer able to work. The bakery eventually was forced to close its doors. Fueled by their hatred for how the vampire had ruined their lives, her parents sent her to Castle Virgadulvlas to become a Knight of the Darkwald Order. She would train there and eventually become a fully-fledged Darkwald Knight, eventually seeing her Order merged into the Lothar Order.
    • Serving as a Houseguard to the then Duke Dietrich von Drachenburg, Mila used her time in His Graces' service as a Waldwächter to learn about the nature of the City's Afflictions and how to best combat them. Though she still remains in his service, she now uses those years of experience for her own purposes. Now, the Afflicted aren't the only hunters in the night.

     
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  2. Percuriam

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    I'll snag this! Expect something in 48ish hours!
     
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    Hey there buddy! Let's get down to business:

    This application looks completely solid to me. Approved.
     
  4. Arcanus01134

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    Thanks Percuriam!
     
  5. Arcanus01134

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    Er, why was my Application changed to "Rejected"?
     
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    Peer help Racial bonuses are no longer a thing
     
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  7. Wumpatron

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    Proficiency update. Just review what the changes are, shouldn't be hard to find, and change your tag to Needs Reviewer
     
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  8. YunYun

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    Racial bonuses were removed from proficiency
     
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    Claimed for Aspirant review.
     
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    @Arcanus01134 Hey your app looks pretty good! There are just a few things that require changes:
    • The currently have listed three points invested in Statesman Knowledge, however with the Proficiency update Statesman Knowledge no longer exists. It has been broken up into the Study Proficiency Category, which you can find the details on here.
    • The body stat number is a tad off, With your current proficiency points, you may have simply missed the extra five you invested in Thin blades, which would change your Body Stat.
    • The Personality section is from a previously accepted version of the application. Whilst overall, since you were accepted with the format you presented it is fine, I would recommend updating it to the current standards for personality.
    • The application seems to not have a section for the Ailor Will of Faith ability. If you simply chose to not have said ability, that is quite alright, however if it was simply something that you were not aware of, you can find more information here.
    Outside of that listed, your application looks wonderful. Please tag me once you have completed the requested changes, and mark those changes in Blue.
    Have a wonderful day.
     
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    Hello @Follower! I've completed the things you've asked me to do.

    • Statesmen has been removed and changed to Diplomatic Skill. Didn't realize that that had been removed.

    • I also don't know how I'd managed to miss adding the +5 to the Body Stat, but I'm glad to see that it's made Mila just a little bit better with her blade.

    • Personality-wise, I'd like to leave that section because I usually abhor writing those parts. I never like writing down exactly how a character acts because it's always situational, I feel. Whatever works best for the narrative and their current arc.

    • Finally, I was not aware Wills of Faith were a thing, but decided to not include them because unfortunately Mila just isn't religious enough. She's not one to doubt Unionism by any means, but she isn't devout enough to gain tangible benefits.

    I've marked the changes in Dark Blue because I am a rebellious soul who doesn't follow rules. Thanks for the review, and thanks for the compliments!

    EDIT: I shifted an additional 2 points from her long blades skill to her Perception.
     
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    @Arcanus01134
    Application seems to be all good now, Approved.
     
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    @Follower, updated new Hobby Proficiencies, as well as shifted around a few stats.
     
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    @Arcanus01134 Your application seems mostly correct, you're just missing the 5 points you get from being a character, as well as up to 5 extra hobby points. If you do not wish to take advantage of these points, then do not worry about it and simply inform me of such.
     
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    Yeah, I've got those currently unused so far, since my character hasnt diversified her interests enough for me to stat out those skills, and I like the level at which her skills currently are. I plan on updating them once it changes ICly.

    @Follower
     
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    Hello! I've changed several bits of Mila's stats, her birthyear, as well as a bit of her backstory.
    • Birthday changed from February 11th 281 AC to February 11th 282 AC

    • Race changed to Lexxon Lingeage Ailor
    • Changed Total Points from 31 (26P | 5H) to 37 (31P | 6H)

    • Changed 13 Thin Blades Combat Skill to 14 Thin Blades Combat Skill

    • Changed 6 Perception Training to 8 Perception Training

    • Added 4 Light Bow Combat Skill
    • Added 1 Literary Arts (H)

    • Removed Athletics Training
    • Changed minor details in backstory
    • Changed 2 Dancing Arts to 4 Dancing Arts

    • Added 2 Athletics Training

    • Added 2 Unarmed Combat Skill

    • Removed Light Bow Combat Skill

    • Removed Diplomatic Case Skill

    • Changed Total Points from 36 (28P | 8H) to 38 (21P | 10 T | 7 H)

    • Changed 14 Thin Blades Combat Skill to 14 Rapier Combat

    • Changed 8 Perception Training to 5 Perception Training

    • Changed 2 Bodycare Training to 5 Bodycare Training

    • Changed 3 Culinary Arts to 4 Baking Art

    • Changed 2 Unarmed Combat Skill to 3 Fist Combat

    • Changed 4 Dancing Arts to 2 Dancing Art

    • Added 4 Light Bow Combat

    • Removed Athletic Training
    I've marked the changes in Dark Blue because I am a rebellious soul who doesn't follow rules.

    Edit: Re-changed some more stuff again. Changes to the changes marked in Hot Pink, because I am still a rebellious soul who doesn't follow rules.

    Re-Edit: Changed the changes because of the update literally just after this, which have been marked in Lime Green, the same color as Mila's judging eyes for rewriting this for the 3rd time in a single review.
     
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    I'm be taking over this application, give me a bit and I'll go through with a review. @Arcanus01134
     
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    @Staff Roleplay, I don't know who's my reviewer anymore, but I've done pretty much a full rewrite of the character.
     
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    Hello! I am sorry for the delay, I had to get through some homework. Here's my review! And I would like to sytart off with I like how streamlined your application is.

    Basic Information
    - no issues here​
    Personality
    - no issues here​
    Visual Information
    - no issues here​
    Skill Information
    - You are actually able to allot a total of 56 points, not just 51. You get age + 5 for core points, this isn't enough for me to warrant keeping you in review, I just thought I'd let you know.​
    Life Story
    - no issues here and a very pleasant read​

    Overall, I can mark you as approved!

    @Arcanus01134
     
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    Oh. I keep forgetting that detail. I'll just leave them as blank for IC learning for now then. Might shuffle points around later on, since she'll be aging up in a month anyways. 6+ whatever else can be used for a lot.

    Thanks Liz!
     
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    Hi, @Lizmun, I finally got around to updating the Proficiencies with the removal of Fortification Arts, as well as doing a few changes to better reflect what I'd like to do in roleplay with the character. Details below, marked in Dull Orange.
    • Aged up Mila by 1 year to 27

    • Weapon changed from Arming Sword & Crossbow to Falchion & Crossbow

    • Changed 10 Alchemy Science to 5 Alchemy Science

    • Changed 8 Sword Combat to 10 Sword Combat

    • Changed 8 Crossbow Combat to 4 Crossbow Combat

    • Changed 6 Perception Training to 5 Perception Training

    • Changed 2 Baking Art to 1 Baking Art

    • Added 10 Pathfinding Art

    • Added 5 Stealth Training

    • Added 3 Affliction Knowledge

    • Added Category for Knighthood

    • Removed Fortification Art
     
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    Hi @Lizmun, updates have been made to reflect the new Age-Proficiency Update. Changes have been marked in Putrid Peas.

    • Changed Date of Birth back to February 11th, 281 AC

    • Changed Unionism (7/10) to Unionism (8/10)

    • Changed 22 Physical Stat to 24 Physical Stat

    • Changed 4 Crossbow Combat to 4 Heavy Ranged Combat

    • Changed 3 Affliction Knowledge to 3 Arcanology: Affliction

    • Changed 2 Burgling Rogue to 3 Roguery: Burglary

    • Changed 2 Dextrous Rogue to 3 Roguery: Sleight of Hand

    • Added 3 Arcanology: Essence

    • Added 3 Schooling: Riding

    • Added Category for Racial Abilities
     
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    Hi @Lizmun, sorry about so quick of a change, but I realized that I forgot a few more changes I wanted to do to reflect the new direction the Darkwald Order was taking. Changes have been marked in Calemberger Cilantro.

    • Changed 24 Physical Stat to 19 Physical Stat

    • Added 10 Husbandry Art

    • Added 3 Arcanology: Ward

    • Added Category for Husbandry

    • Removed Schooling: Riding

    • Removed Theatre Art
     
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    Bump for reviewer.

    The character has been temporarily changed while waiting for the Knight Update, with all backstory and relevant information being highly dependent on where that rewrite goes. Changes have been marked in Vindictive Violet.

    • Race changed from Lexxon Lineage Ailor to Ailor
    • Changed Total Points from 60 (60 P | 10 H) to 65 (60 P | 10 H | 5 HS2)
    • Changed 10 Pathfinding Art to 15 Pathfinding Art
    • Changed Religion from Unionism (8/10) to Dogmatic Vierzehn Unionist
    • Changed Clothing from Darkwald Style Overcoat & Tricorne to Commoner
    • Changed 19 Physical Stat to 22 Physical Stat
    • Added Progression Talents
    • Added Warrior Level 2
    • Added Rogue Level 1
    • Added Honed Skill 2
    • Added Rogue Gift 2
    • Added Calem Language
    • Removed Knighthood
    • Removed Mind Wall 1
    • Removed Keen Mind 1
    • Removed Arcanology: Essence
    • Removed Alt-Regalisch Language
    • Removed Leutz-Vixe Language
     
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    Approved.
     
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    Bump for reviewer.

    The character has entirely changed in several aspects following several lore retcons, changes to Massivecraft's general story, and generally just being absent from Massivecraft. Changes have been marked in Excited Ermine.

    • Changed Bruh, Literally Everything. I think the only thing that wasn't changed was the name, birthdate, and the fact that her parents were bakers.

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    Hi @BiBiBirdie, I've updated the character following the sudden Proficiency Update. It's pretty much the same thing. Changes have been marked in Unexpected Ultramarine.

    • Changed Strength Allocation from Strength: 1 to Strength: 2

    • Changed Wisdom Allocation from Wisdom: 3 to Wisdom: 4

    • Changed Dexterity Allocation from Dexterity: 6 to Dexterity: 4

    • Changed Weapon from Crossbow, Falchion, & Flintlock to Crossbow, Daggers, & Falchion

    • Added Melee: Short Blades

    • Added Society: Grauwald Wisdom

    • Added Ranged: Brittle Shot

    • Removed Ranged: Backup Shot

    • Removed Roguery: Stealth Skill

    • Removed Firearms: Pistol
     
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    Hello @BiBiBirdie, with the return of the Darkwald Order as the Lothar Order, I've updated Mila back to becoming a Knight once again. Changes have been marked in Reemergent Red.
    • Change Constitution Allocation from Constitution: 0 to Constitution: 1
    • Changed Dexterity Allocation from Dexterity: 4 to Dexterity: 3
    • Changed Husbandry: Mount Husbandry to Presence: Mount Husbandry
    • Changed Husbandry: Pet Husbandry to Presence: Pet Husbandry
    • Changed Weapon from Crossbow, Daggers, & Falchion to Daggers, Falchion, & Flintlock Brace
    • Changed Inventory Klokktech Maintenance Kit to Gothitech Maintenence Kit
    • Added Melee: Skirmisher
    • Added Melee: Tactician
    • Added Defense: Counterplay
    • Added Artificer: Mech-Suit (Gothitech)
    • Added Scholarly: Deeplore Wisdom
    • Added Firearms: Rushdown
    • Added Knighthood
    • Added Ritualism
    • Removed Melee: Blades
    • Removed Melee: Short Blades
    • Removed Engineering: Familiar (Klokktech)
    • Removed Society: Grauwald Wisdom
    • Removed Ranged: Brittle Shot
    • Removed Roguery: Burglary Skill
     
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    Hello @BiBiBirdie, I've done just a few minor changes to my Proficiencies following the update to State Point Buy. Changes have been marked in Maintenance Maroon.
    • Change Familiar, Eng. | Kriegshund - Klokktech Cal. Dobs to Familiar, Eng. | Kriegshund - Gothitech Cal. Dobs
    • Added Melee: Hunter
    • Added Ranged: Scaling Pack
    • Added State: Agitator
    • Added Ritualistic Manifestation
    • Added Ritualistic Scripture
    • Added Abilities
    • Added Ritualism Aesthetics
    • Added Ritualism Material
    • Removed Melee: Skirmisher
    • Removed Roguery: Parkour
    • Removed Presence: Pet Husbandry
    • Removed Familiar, Race | Edelgarde Calemberg Adelaar
    • Removed Pet, Husb. | Stolz - Waldmarker Black Hawk
     
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    Approved, but please remember to change your tag to needs re-review to avoid delays!
     
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    Hello @BiBiBirdie, a few more changes have been added to the character sheet, mostly involving the Bruiser Pack. I've also pre-emptively aged her up by 1 year. Changes have been marked in Bruised Burgundy.
    • Changed Age | 29 to Age | 30
    • Added Bruiser: Agony
    • Added Bruiser: Feint
    • Added Aesthetics | Eye of Unionism, Imperial Icons
    • Removed Ranged: Scaling
    • Removed Roguery: Pickpocket
     
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