Spoiler: Theme Full name: Adrian von Bardouixe (Mirafaren Yinmyar) Age: 308 Gender: Male Race: Vampiric Maritime Altalar Sexuality: Bisexual Preferred Weapon: Mace Spoiler: Inventory -Steel Mace -Ornate Dagger -Crysteel Rapier -Money pouch with 50 regals -Golden wedding band -Red crystal necklace (70 points) -Combat: +30 Blunt Combat Skill (+10 From Proficiency Points +10 From Auld Catharsis) +20 Shielding Combat Skill (From Proficiency Points) -Body Proficiency +10 Perception Training -Knowledge: +4 Magical Knowledge (Sanguinology, from Proficiency Points) -Arts: +10 Musical Arts (From Hobby Points) +16 Literary Arts (From Proficiency Points) Body Shape: Physical Stat: [30 Blunt + 20 Shielding] = 50 Body Build: Strongman Body Fat: Average Body Fat Vampirism Mutations: Dorkarth bloodline Auld Beastlording Auld Shielding Auld Catharsis Auld Elementing Common Modern Altalar Eye colour: Crimson red Hair colour: Raven Black Hair Style: Long and straight Skin colour: Pale Clothing: Long black coat, white shirt, dark trousers, knee high leather boots Height: 6’10” The Core List Character Alignment: Chaotic Evil Character Personality: ISTP - The Craftsman Character Religion: Atheist 307 Years ago on a cold afternoon on January 17th, a boy was born to a poor, single mother living on an island in the Fin'ul Straits. This child was named Mirafaren Yinmyar, after his father who had unfortunately passed away three months prior to his birth. The two lived in a small one bedroom house, barely having money enough to pay rent, let alone provide food for both of them. And so Mirafaren was an unhealthy thin baby, the only food he got was when his mother gave him her own food. They only lived like this for two years however, for his mother had decided that she could not hope to provide for her child, and so gave him up for adoption. A traveling couple of Anglian Ailors ended up adopting the boy, taking him back home to their farm in Anglia, where luckily he was better taken care of, and given the new name of Adrian von Bardouixe. Adrian, as he knew himself to be called, lived as an only child for another two years, but when he was four years old his mother gave birth to two twin boys. Adrian helped to look after and care for the boys, who he saw as nothing short of his brothers. Along with this when he reached his teenage years he became friends with a girl just a little younger than him by the name of Nerezza, another Altalar who quickly grew to be his best friend. When Adrian wasn't out getting into trouble with Nerezza he'd be home helping his father tend to the fields. When his brothers both turned 14 they left home to join the School of Thousand Blades in Axford to become knights, however Adrian was unable to attend himself, due to his Altalar heritage. His parents had noticed Adrian's disappointment with this, and for his birthday paid a Dressolini fencing master to give Adrian lessons in fencing, a style he quickly grew to love. He continued to train with his master for many years, until at the age of 29 he joined the military. From this point on Adrian's life would begin to drastically change in a course of events that shaped his very future. He served for a year in the military without issue, but when he turned 30 would begin the start of the Great Vampire Wars in Ellador. Adrian along with a good handful of his regiment were unfortunate enough to be captured by the new Dorkarth army, and turned into Sanguine themselves to aid the Dorkarth princes in the coming wars. Adrian, who was now a Sanguine, fought in many of the battles that took place in the Great Vampire Wars, and survived until the very end, until the newly crowned King Jorstig and his Skagger allies managed to develop the Hallowed Lantern. He was there as his fellow Vampires had their skin singed by the barbaric devices, managing to flee the battle, and Hedryll as a whole to avoid the massacre that was soon to come, marking the end of the war. Adrian wrote down the events of the war in as much detail as he could recall, now travelling Aloria alone, moving from town to town quenching his thirst for blood while avoiding the authorities as best he could, keeping himself within the shadows. It wasn't long until Adrian decided to return to his home in Anglia, though of course when he arrived he was met with an empty, abandoned and run down house, the farmland being overgrown and unusable, for while he was gone his parents had met their end, dying of old age, while his twin brother had grown old and grey, now residing in the City of Regalia with their families. Adrian felt almost nothing when he learnt of his parents deaths, and instead took their estate for his own, now living and feeding off of the new generation of Ailor who lived in the town, most being the children of his childhood friends who were middle aged themselves now, with their own families. It felt strange for Adrian to witness this from the sidelines, watching as his old friends grew old and departed to the next life while he remained frozen in time almost, never aging, never growing old. He continued to live here for around 50 years, now aged a little over 200. He decided to leave when he began to draw attention to himself, taking what was left in the family vault for himself. He now moved to the city of Regalia, where he spent his time within the shadows of the sewers and slums, getting involved in gangs and territory wars. This changed when he met a man called Don however. Don was a Sanguine much like himself, with a coven. Although he was younger than Adrian, he reminded him almost of the late Dorkarth Princes, and so in time Adrian joined him and rose the ranks. This was when he once again found his wife, Nerezza. For a while they were happy, but in time they decided to leave the city, and a series of events would occur that'd see Nerezza cured, and eventually killed. When Adrian returned to Regalia he was a new man. With Don now cured, he decided to build up his own coven, giving those who need it a place to call home.
Turall only gives 10 to daggers and acrobatics, correct how you've stated your points. Mark your edits in red and tag me when you've made the appropriate changes. @__TheDarkLord__
Alright! I’m sorry I haven’t gotten to you yet; been terribly busy! Your character will be reviewed today.
Alrighty here goes! Please expand on Adrian's early life, I request this so as to get a deeper glimpse into Adrian's pre-infection attitudes. Please also detail when he was born and when he went to school, you stated that 'after many years when he was 21'. How many is it? Finally, who among the brothers' was infected first? If they are forming a mini-coven then the eldest infected is typically the leader. You stated that Adrian now, as a vampire, seeks to establish a family but vampires are very possessive and jealous of relationships. Perhaps you should change the wording to more possessive tones and may I suggest that you allow Adrian's siblings to jockey for one another's girl. You may mark your changes in red.
Hello, it's been almost a week since we've last discussed your character. Are you still interested in getting this character approved?
@Infinatum The changes have been made. I decided to completely re-write a good chunk of the backstory, as it was almost a year out of date.
@Infinatum Sorry I also changed my bloodline. All of the changes because of this have been made in purple.
The Eldest brother Sanchellios would jockey for your girl anytime ;) -- or was it Adrian who's the oldest? Can't remember...
Ah good luck with that ;) and I'd be lying if I said I remembered honestly, I just remember he took charge.
I reapprove this, though do keep in mind that by taking Auld Aging, your character is incurable. In other words, your vampirism is permanent.
Updated to the new proficiency system, along with changing his Sanguine Bloodline and race to Altalar.
Alright, let's get right to the review! Under your basic information don't forget to put down what weapon he uses. Please do not forget to put down your body stat here! This is the old format, update it to either the questionaire or the core list one. Once you make the requested edits in green, tag me! @__TheDarkLord__
@__TheDarkLord__ Do keep in mind he is capped at 30 for his body stat because he's an altalar. However, I will APPROVE this app as long as you put his cap down as well.
Sorry for the edit so early on! Wanted to try the new bloodline but decided I didn't enjoy it, so changed him back to Dorkarth. Along with that I’ve added in his Altalar ring. Edits made in purple! @Nesstro
Just switched around a couple of my points, changes once again in purple! This is the last one I swear. (For now). Also added the changes due to the Altalar update. @Nesstro
Changed his age and completely re-did his backstory to accompany his new age. Edits made in purple! @Nesstro
