Zas'kince Allas

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  1. Yoggery

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    Basic Information
    • Shortened Name: Zas’kince Cielnalla Allas
    • Full Elvish Name: Zas’cinciella Ajocie’cielnalla Oellen’lloa Allas
    • Nicknames: Zassy, Zas.
    • Age: 32
    • Gender: Male
    • Race: Disciple of Shenath Kathar
    • Sexuality: Bisexual
    Skill Information
    • Total Proficiency Points: 32 - 10 Vampire Mutations
    • Combat
    • +12 Fast Blade Combat Skill ( +10 Kathar, +2 Points )
    • Knowledge
    • +10 Magical Knowledge (Sanguinology, Racialism) ( +10 Kathar )
    • Science
    • +30 Alchemy Knowledge ( +10 Points, +20 Vampirism )
    • +5 Medical Knowledge ( +5 Points )
    • Art
    • +5 Musical Knowledge ( +5 Points )
    • Bodyshape
    • 1 + 0 * 2 = 1 Physical Stat
    • Average Body Shape
    • Low Body Fat
    • Languages
    • Common - Free Language
    • Kathar Elven Dialect - Learned in childhood
    • Special Traits/Spells/Mutations
    • Vampirism - Shilôt Bloodline
    • Wineries of Old
    • Drawl Thirsting
    • Unturned Feeding
    • Feeding Delight
    • Brood Stasis

    Visual Information
    • Eye Color: Blue
    • Hair Color: White
    • Hair Style: Bangs that go just below the eye, straight, and allowed to do whatever.
    • Skin Color: Grey
    • Clothing: Usually black trench coats, basic pants, boots, and shirt. Trench coat made to hold some potions, and sometimes carries a bag of various concoctions.
    • Height: 6’7
    Personality and Abilities
    • First Paragraph: Zas’kince is generally a tad bit more social now, though he can still be slightly shy. He still has a face of disgust and still judges people, but he’s not as outward about it anymore. He’ll talk to you, and try to get along, just don’t rub him the wrong way. If you’re unfriendly with him, he’ll try and find ways to get his vengeance, such as tricking you into eating Choddles. Due to his judgmental thoughts, he’s very picky with who he’s friends with. Overall, people will see Zas'kince as slightly shy, but a tad bit rude.
    • Second Paragraph: Zas’kince criticizes himself and is not very sure of himself a lot of times. He wants power and wealth, but he doubts himself of ever getting these things. However, instead of pitying himself and doing nothing about it, he usually tries to improve himself. His biggest fear is rejection from his family, so he, on occasion practices basic forging. Mostly blade repairs, to try and avoid this.
    • Third Paragraph: Zas’kince generally treats a few of his friends with mutual respect. He’d do a few favors for them, and ask them for a few favors. However, more closer friends become more so actual friends than pawns. He’d joke around with them, and is somewhat caring and generous to those he truly cares about. Family wise, he respects his family somewhat, and wants them to respect him. Hence why he learned a thing or two about blacksmithing. He’d go out of his way to help actual friends and family, but mostly just wants to do his own thing
    • Fourth Paragraph: Zas’kince is neutral, he’ll want to do the right thing, but not always do the right thing. Sometimes, he’ll do the wrong thing, but not often. However, he isn’t all evil, he will on occasion do a thing that’ll make him look good. Like give a homeless person a regal, if it’s another Kathar most of the time. Most of his good is mostly towards those less fortunate, or he feels can use his assistance. Zas'kince in a nutshell is not an angel, nor a demon.
    Weaknesses
    • Nearsightedness - Zas’Kince cannot focus on faraway objects and needs glasses to do so. The problem is, Zas’kince doesn’t wear glasses, despite his nearsightedness. He’s not a fan of glasses, so this gets problematic at moments.
    Life Story
    ~Born 275 A.C, on January 28th, in the Shadow Isles~
    • Born 275 A.C in the Shadow Isles as a son of Xajo Allas, his mother being Eilla. Zas’kince didn’t have much interaction with his father, and the only reason he’s an Allas is legitimization. Eilla was healer, and was brilliant in Alchemy. He'd be born as a Shenath as a Kayth.
    • Turning age nine, notices Zas’kince’s fascination with alchemy and healing, and decides once he’s older, to begin teaching him. When he’s older, around ten years old, his alchemy lessons began in the School of Alchemy. However, because of the culture he’s raised in, he’d also learn basics of fighting with daggers, and short sword. Void and Exist information due to the culture he was in. He'd be forced to follow the Prefect of Pride, though he didn't worship strongly secretly. Mostly due to his mother wanting him to one day be able to flee the Shadow Isles and the Dread Empire one day.
    • Zas’kince turning fifteen was already a student level, began training his Threlwar Abilities, and basic first aid and medicine. He picks up first aid and medicine quick. Threlwar is taking time for him to pick up, assuming it takes time to improve. Unfortunetly, most of the other Kathar shun Zas’kince for being a male and learning an intellect school instead of a combat school.
    • Zas’kince begins developing his social anxiety around age seventeen due to the bullying his kin gives him. Turning eighteen, he began to wonder about the world around him, curious of what is out there outside of the Shadow Isles.
    • Nineteen twenty years old, he is knowledgeable of Alchemy, medicine, and basic first aid thanks to his mother. He decides to take his daggers, some of his alchemy gear, and try to sneak out of the Shadows Isles on a Kathar pirate ship. The ship’s destination was Daendroc to a Cielothar village, where he sneaked off away when the ship was docked.
    • Turning twenty one, he began his trip to the city Die Akademie von Kaiseman was, in hopes of enrolling into the school. He finally made it to the city, though, quickly needed to learn Common in order to understand the locals, however, he arrived when he was twenty three. He'd also take interest in Lute after hearing a local Bard, and used money from selling the little amount of alchemy he'd have to buy one of his own. He'd learn through trial and error, eventually, learning from a friend he made. He also took time developing his voice in singing, and poetry to write songs whenever he's not studying and making potions.
    • Twenty four years old, he was accepted into Die Akademie Von Kaisemen. Though, he didn’t get much attention from teachers, so most of the work was by himself He was also bullied around by the teachers and fellow students for being a Kathar. He’d learn more of Alchemy til he is Expert level of Alchemy within the academy, which would happen when he turns twenty nine. Deciding to move to Anglia around that time to giving alchemy aid, and using first aid skills he learned and practiced from his mother.
    • Turning thirty one, he’d move to Regalia itself and after a while of making friends and enemies. He’d join the Alchimia Order and put more use of his abilities. Due to the nature of working with others in his new job, he’d learn to be a bit more sociable and a bit more kind. He’d also drop Void Worship at this point, not doing anything for the faith in months to next to a year, and not seeing a use for it. Rendering himself without a religion. He’d also adopt a Dragged Crow from a pet shop in the city.
    • Zas’kince then went to Daen for a while for a vacation and to visit some family. However, he was kidnapped by Void Worshiping Kathar, and forced to go through heavy beating and torture. He'd also be branded void script along his chest before being let go. After spending time to let wounds heal enough, he’ll make his way back to Regalia. Once he got back to Regalia, he joined the Vigilant Shield. Then, the vampire outbreak happened, in which Zas'kince had to fight in. He got dragged away by the vampires, and went through a week in the vampires coven base cells. He lost an eye, and slowly watched as the vampires devoured himself, his friends, and watched them all turn. Then, he was finally released and had to go through the curing process. His thirty second birthday came around, and he decided to head out of the city to a small Dressolini majority town for a few nights. Only to be kidnapped by Shilôt Bloodline vampires, bitten, and turned. He'd return to the Regalian city, where his life would continue.
     
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  2. SorryNari

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    You can only gain the atraves bonus if you invest a point in.

    "Due to the Altalar, Isldar and Shendar sharing the perfect dimensions for the Atraves Stave, whenever they put any Proficiency towards this weapon, they gain +10 Proficiency from ease of handling."​

    You only get +10 from schools in the three sections. So instead of +20 for each, you get +10 Horticulture, +10 Quick Fingers, and +10 Alchemy.

    "Schools take 10 years to graduate from, meaning they require a 10 Proficiency Point investment. When graduation comes, these 10 invested proficiency points are tripled and divided over different Proficiencies provided by the school. For example, a person who went to the School of Turall gains +10 Proficiency in Dagger, Shortsword and Acrobatics."​
     
  3. Yoggery

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    Fixed I think
     
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    If you added +2 proficiency, then it would be +12 Atraves Staves.
     
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    Your fourth paragraph needs another sentence.
     
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    BOP! Fixes have been made
     
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    Hello! Claiming this for review!
     
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    Alright, let's get right into the review, shall we?
    Make these changes in blue and tag me when you're done!

    • I'm noticing a few grammar and spelling errors here and there throughout your application. I suggest going through it once or twice and trying to fix as many as you can.
    Basic Information (Required)
    • Please remove your character's Special Permission, seeing as that system is no longer being used due to the new proficiency update.
     
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    I suck with grammar, so I probably didn't got all the mistakes. However, I think I broke up a few run on sentences and found spelling errors.
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    @JennaLikesCoffee
    Did some rewriting for the proficiency system update as described HERE. The changes I made is in red.
     
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    I will be taking over for Jennalikescoffee!
    Expect a response within 24 hours.
     
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    ☼ Staff Review! ☼
    Hello, my name is Eccetra and I’ll be reviewing your app today.​
    • Void and Exist Knowledge is a regular proficiency, rather than a cultural proficiency!
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    • This means you're actually using 0 cultural points at the moment, since Horticulture is derived from the School of Alchemy. You can add some more if you like, or leave it blank, but make sure the total at the top is correct!
    Please mark your changes in another color and tag me when you’re finished!
     
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    @Eccetra
    Hello, I have made some changes, some new, some just the edits you told me to make.
    I put Void/Exist knowledge in the regular proficiencies area, and I've made edits to the life story to give him Cultural Proficiency's. If he's over skilled, let me know, and I'll edit the cultural stuff out (except Horticulture, since that's from a school).
     
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    @Eccetra I did edits regarding the new Kathar and Dread Empire, there isn't to much, but edits made in this color
     
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    @Eccetra
    Hello! Did some edits for the new template.
     
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    All good! You don't need to tag me if it's really minor an optional section.

    ☼ Approved! ☼
     
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    @Eccetra
    Hello! Made tons of edits for Zas'kince's sheet. Playing around with the proficiency's, editing the personality, adding to the life story, added a new section. Changes are in this color. If the changes aren't that acceptable, I have the sheet before I edited it on a google doc.
     
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    @Eccetra
    Hi, a little bump for this.
     
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    And here is my review for you: Approval. The greatest kind of review. Good work
     
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    All changes are in Blue!
    The mutations bit I barely know about, so if there's any changes you want me to make regarding it, please let me know. I can easily remove or change the mutations.
     
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    Made a bit more changes, learning some things about Kathar's and Void Essences. Also gave him brandings :3
     
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    Sorry, I'm no longer a member of the lore staff team, but fret not we have a lot of other talented members to handle this. @Staff Roleplay
     
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    Claimed for aspirant review.
     
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    • Skills:
      • You still have 11 points to spend in the cultural tab. You don't have to add these, but if you don't, add in you have 11 points unspent culturally.
      • From your age, you are permitted three languages other than common. You have four. Please remove one.
    • Weaknesses:
      • Add these into a spoiler.

    Make these edits and tag me once finished!
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    @Vegemiite
    The changes are in green, removed the bodily mutations due to me finding stuff on the wiki that custom mutations aren't a thing anymore, and changes for the proficiency!
     
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    Only athletics is x2, meaning your physical stat is only 1.
    Common also now costs ten years like any other language. Please remove one to fit with the age requirement.
    Put the Weaknesses into a spoiler.

    Make these edits and tag me once done!
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    @Staff Roleplay
    *Changes*
    • Gave him Shilôt Bloodline vampirism.
    • Anything in the green.
    • His birthday passed, so I gave him a new proficiency point, and spent it.
    • Removed PTSD due to vampires.
     
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    Hey! I'm claiming this for review!​
     
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    Hey! Sorry for the late response but it’s review time!​
    • So his age is listed as 32, but you only listed 31 for his prof points, please fix this for me!
    That’s my only issue! Please edit this in a new color and tag me @Rochelle_ when you’re done!
     

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