Marius Telek

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  1. foll_fox

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    Basic Information
    • Full Name: Marius Talak, The Fox
    • Age: 36
    • Gender: Male
    • Race: Full blood Ailor
    • Main Ambition: To avenge those who can not avenge themselves
    • Special Permission: None
    Basic Information (Expansion)
    • Marius is a vagabond who travels the land taking on jobs to get him from place to place
    • Marius' birth is a mystery to him he was an orphan until the age of 8 when he was adopted by Kylon Telek and his wife Astra Telek, Kylon was very well known and repsected farmer. When Marius turned 13 he was sent to the school of stealthmark. During his time in the school both Kylon and Astra were killed when one of Kylons shady deals became knowledge of a noble family.

    Skill Information (Optional)
    • School: School of Stealthmark
    • Level: Warrior
    • Source: Attended The School of Stealthmark
    Visual Information (Required)
    • Eye Color: A very Faint green almost fading to grey
    • Hair Color: Light brown, just barely darker than dirty blond
    • Hair Style: Short wavy hair
    • Skin Color: Slightly tan
    • Clothing: Black shirt and brown slacks with a belt running around his waist and a strap over his left shoulder. When he is hired to kill someone he wears a fox mask to hide his identity.
    • Height: 5ft 7in
    • Body Build: Athletic
    • Weapon of Choice: Daggers
    Visual Information (Expansion)
    • Marius' right eye lid only opens about three quarters of the way at most, due to damage done to his eye socket. His nose is wide and has a slight curve to it due to being broken several times. His jaw line is very elegant and curved.He has one major scar that runs from above his left eye that curves across his nose down below his left eye(Sort of a wide U shape. His most common demeanor is a very calm face but his gaze seems very piercing.
    • Marius is five foot 7 inches tall, he has a toned athletic build with muscles that are not massive but give him the look of someone who can hold their own.
    • Marius wears a black shirt with brown slacks, a black cloak, a belt to hold his long sword and two daggers that are kept in scabbards behind his back , as well as a strap that runs across his chest and back over the left sholder that he uses to hold his array of throwing knives. he also wears a thin silver chain around his neck that he was given by his now dead lover.
    • Marius has a deep, low pitched voice. He normally speaks at a quicker paces than most but when he gets aggitated he will begin to talk slowly to his target to try to belittle them, and make them feel less intelegent. As well when he gets excited he talks more rapidly causing himself to stutter.
    Personality and Abilities (Required)
    • Publicly:When passing Marius in the street most would just ignore him due to his quiet nature and Marius does his best to avoid drawing attention to himself. The only time Marius is okay with being noticed is when he is drinking and unwinding. When people hear his name most commoners would just shrug and say they have no idea who he is. Those that work in the underbelly of society tho would either avidly try and avoid him or try to test his prowess.
    • Internally: Marius is a confident and kind person when just taking time to relax at a pub or even when he is working a job on his own, but when he is put into a position when he has to work with others and they are relying on him for aid he gets slightly nervous and takes extra precautions to try and avoid losing anyone. He looks at is as if anyone whom he is working with are his responsability to protect.
    • Friends and Lovers: Marius has a hard time truly connecting with someone on a personal level but when he does they are a part of his family. Those that have gotten through to him and reached that level find him to be one of the kindest and most loving individuals who would go out of his way to keep them safe and not let any harm come to them. Marius takes those feelings to a whole new level when he falls in love with someone. He would go to the ends of the earth to protect and provide for those that have gotten there way into his tightly guarded heart.
    • Morality: Marius is a neutral soul he doesn't care for the labeling of good or evil, one of his main forms of income come as assassinations or just killings in general, but those are usually to help weak and innocent individuals who had been harmed by corrupt guards and such. He knows that killing someone is not a good deed but he sees what he does as a good deed helping to protect those that can not protect themselves. His motto when it comes to killing is " One life to save many, seems like a easy decision".
    • Fifth Paragraph (OPTIONAL): Marius is a believer in the old gods, he believes that when one meets there end they do not continue on into any type of afterlife or become reincarnated. He shows respect to nobility but does not let that stop him when it comes to killing someone of noble birth if they use their power to harm those that they are meant to protect. He knows he is at the same level as any other commoner in the eyes of guards and nobles.
    Talents
    • Adept with daggers: Marius' preferred weapon is the dagger. He learned and honed his skills at the school of stealthmark until he could best almost anyone in the school. He would much rather make his way up behind someone and end things quickly and quietly then to draw his long sword and get into a loud noticable fight.
    Weaknesses (OPTIONAL)
    • Over Protective: When alone Marius is an extremely talented and dangerous individual. When he is put into a group though he is constatly trying to keep an eye on his teammates/ traveling comanions to make sure no one loses their life.
    Personality and Abilities (Expansion)

    • When in normal situations just moving about if Marius becomes nervous or anxious he will put his arms behind his back and grip the handles of his dagger.
    • Marius is a great climber, he can climb very tall trees and cliff sides(as long as theres somewhere for him to grip) with relative ease.
    Likes
    • Marius loves the smell of meat pies, it reminds him of having dinner with his adoptive mother Astra, spending time baking the pie together and enjoying eachothers company.
    • Marius loves going to local orphanages and churches and playing with the children there helping them to have a good day of smiles and laughter makes him feel like hes helping them feel something he didn't feel until he was adopted.
    • Marius loves the rain. To him the rain is calming, it is as if when the rain comes it washes the anxiety or nervousness away helping him to feel a sense of serenity
    Dislikes
    • Children being hurt is something that will easily set Marius into a fury, if a child is attacked or harmed while just innocently playing or walking in the street, Marius will be at their side ready to protect and let no more harm come to the child.
    • Marius hates people who think they deserve the world for just being born high class. He will very quickly being to argue with someone of high birth about what they deserve and what they should get.
    Relationships (Optional)
    • Kylon and Astra Telek, Dead Adoptive parents.
    • Sartan Leonius, Best Friend growing up and a rival in school until his death.
    • Linos Telek, Uncle and mentor before going to the school of stealthmark.
    Life Story (Required)
    Marius was born to a mother and father he did not know. The first memories he can recall are of the day Kylon and Astra Telek came to adopt him just after his 8th birthday. It was a happy yet sad day because he had to leave his close friend Sartan behind, but Sartan knew this was a great moment for Marius so he wished him the best and helped him pack his belongings not too see each other again for many years. Marius spent 5 years living a peaceful existence with his new adoptive parents in the town of Fauroux. Fauroux is not a very big town, with only roughly 200 people calling it home, that is lead by a man that calls himself a lord but does not hold any power in the Regalian Empire, and with the city being as small as it is mostly passes under the radar of the Empire. Everything was going well for Marius until one fateful day he returned home from being out with friends to find Kylon at his desk sobbing. Kylon explained to Marius he had been supplying a rebel group with food in hopes they would take over and he would have a more favorable position in the city. The rebellion had been wiped out and all those who supplied them would soon be found and killed. Kylon sent Marius and Astra to live with brother Linos in hiding until they could being a new life.
    After 4 days of riding Marius and Astra reached Linos' home on the outskirts of the town Moissieu, Linos set Astra up in a spare bedroom and began talking to Marius about what had happened to his brother. Linos offered to train Marius to protect himself. The next two years Marius trained under the tutelage of his Uncle and learned how to wield a dagger and how to survive off the land. Just six months after Marius' 15th birthday Linos finally decided Marius had shown he had the potential so he placed him into the same school he had trained at Stealthmark.
    Marius entered the school and felt nervous when being put into his band of trainees. That was until he felt a smack hit him in the back and as he turned a familiar voice. He didn't recognize the man until he introduced himself " Boy i guess ive changed in these past seven years its me Sartan." The next 4 years Marius' band trained together and became a tight nit group. Until one day just three months before their 5 year anniversary of being put together they went on a simple guarding mission for a lord that was coming into town. Everything went south, the caravan was attacked and Marius was cut all around his left eye leaving what looked to be a paper thin horseshoe cut on his face. When Marius finally regained his senses in the battle he realized that the lord had been taken to safety and the group that attacked had either been killed or run off. He began checking everyone to make sure they were okay when he stubbled on a small group all croch around a body. When he finally got close all he saw was the body of his life long friend and a spear protrudeing from his back.
    The next year seemed like pain to Marius waking up every day not being able to see his bestfriend and rival. Just 9 months after his 20th birthday the time finally came to where Marius was granted the ranking of Warrior in the school and he decided it was time for him to leave. He began wandering around the world traveling from continent to continent doing whatever work he could find to buy food and drink. He returned to Linos' home once and found that Astra had passed away. Marius learned she had a weak heart from birth and that the pain and stress from losing Kylon had killed her. Marius over time began going by the nickname "The Fox" to hide his true identity and protect anyone he becomes close with. It wasn't until 6 years later just before his 27th birthday that Marius met a woman named Jeze. She was a new waitress at his favorite drinking location. They spent 2 years together after that until Jeze came down with a terrible illness that required a very expensive medication to treat and she would need to be on it for several years to fully rid herself of the illness. Marius knew he did not have enough money to pay for more than a year of this medication. The work in the area he was in was not going to be enough either. While trying to figure out a way to attain the money the doctor that had treated Jeze had mentioned it was heard to get the medicine over from the Regalian Empire due to pirates and tariffs . He didn't think much of it for a few day but then it hit him "Where there are lords and kings there are people that either they want dead or that want them dead and theres money to be made on those deaths." So Marius talked with Jeze and they set off to the regalian capital to try and find work and keep his love alive
     
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  2. HydraLana

    HydraLana The Very Gay Walking Talking Lore Encyclopedia Staff Member Lore3

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    My Review:
    • I would like you to please limit his weapon of choice to one selection as his truly preferred weapon if he had to decide between them.
    • I ask that you review your personality paragraphs and ensure that each has at least three points of content, specifically looking at paragraph 3.
    • His talent of "Lower Body Strength" reads like a strength to me and not a talent. Perhaps adjust it say he's not easily distracted or possesses some other skill that helps him to work out hard?
    Life Story
    • What city was this supposedly rebellion in exactly? Was it somewhere part of the Regalian Empire?
    • Where was this brother's house, in the same city or elsewhere?
    • Who is Sartan? There is no mention of this character anywhere earlier in the application.
    • The ending of the story is a bit confusing as it does not explain why your character has come to Regalia. Could you please state why he has done this?
    • I am not sure how old your character is throughout this application, please state his age at key points in his life so I know when is when.
    Please tag me when the edits have been completed in green @foll_fox
     
  3. foll_fox

    foll_fox Weirdo

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    @HydraLana All edits are in green and i just removed the Lower Body strength Talent i can't think of another talent that would fit well with the vision i have and i agree it is more of a strenght then a talent. I also realized i forgot to add the reason for the nickname the fox so i added it in the clothing
     
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    HydraLana The Very Gay Walking Talking Lore Encyclopedia Staff Member Lore3

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    My sole point of review is that your life story now exceeds the maximum of 900 words, please cut it down to the limit or below the limit, tagging me once you are done @foll_fox
     
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    Approved.
     

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