Character Information Full Name: Abrielle Aoûte Looxois Phoenix Coeur Fouchières Corbeau De Rhoneux Race: Ailor, Ithanian Age: 39 Gender: Female Eye Color: Sea Blue Core Concept A dedicated Vultragon unionist who recently went through a period of self doubt and reflection in her homeland she seeks to redeem herself in the eyes of her faith. Invested in helping to quell the rise of afflicted she has spent her time away training with the new various forms of firearms, preferring to stay distant and support more capable fighters. Despite her new found distrust of magic and afflicted she remains friendly and diplomatic in her approach, never using intentionally lethal force. Proficiencies Strength: 0 Constitution: 3 Bulwark pack Protectorate pack Thread craft Wisdom: 4 Affliction Wisdom Dimenthist Wisdom Archive Wisdom Amontaar Wisdom Dexterity: 5 Purity Pack Buster Pack Grenadier Pack Suppressant Pack Sniper Pack Magic: 0 Charisma: 2 Diplomat pack Empire language pack Languages Example: Common (Free) Ithanian (Native) East Linguist Pack (Linguistics) Appearance Information Abrielle stands at 5 foot 6 inches with tanned skin and an average figure, with long curly dirty blonde hair often put into loose braids, normally in finely made but modest clothing Life Story Was born into a wealthy family to a successful opera singer and living a life of comfort and luxury, a quiet and particularly well behaved child she often did well in her studies and found herself at home within the various Unionist temples of her home city After her brother left for the knights Abrielle was inspired to follow her own path traveled with a mentor who taught her much about what it means to be a Celate and expanded her view on the Empire as a whole and it’s various classes of citizens but also how to defend herself with simple shielding tactics in case she should ever face danger. After passing her Celacy trials and spending a few more years traveling and helping people across Regalia Abrielle decided to come to the city, living with her cousin and becoming involved with the capital's temples and various Noble politics, though she fled when the city was liberated of the Sanguine incursion failing in her duties as a Celate while she wandered in search of purpose and guidance Abrielle spent her time away learning more about the forces that did so much damage to her new home, while also finding a skill with new firearms that found rising popularity throughout the lands. After hearing about the Brallona Occupation and it’s eventual end she decided it was time to return home and find use for her new skills among the faithful of the city
@Rose Add another paragraph to Abrielle's backstory. Maybe clarify what her training entailed, and how her family life was.
@fantuinn Some changes to Abrielle, mostly just a name change but added a new paragraph to reflect rp'd events. Edits made in Blue
@fantuinn Re-made her app to apply to new changes. changes mostly involve proficiency, minor edits to story, and replacing her sorcery with faith manifest
@Rose Abrielle is not approved for a Faith Manifest special permission, and therefore cannot have it on her application.
Due to the time that has passed, I'll be picking this application up for its re-review. Skill Information Your physical stat calculates to a total of 12; 12 Shielding Combat = 12 Physical Stat. Life Story I don't see any explicit mentions of Abrielle's time in the College of Priesthood. Also, it makes no sense for her to have gone to this school if she has not gone to any Songaskian regions. You have to choose a school that is written on the Schooling page. If I'm mistaken about how you wrote it, do let me know. That's all to my review. Once you've made these edits, change the text of it to another color and tag me in a post.
@Jouster Changes made, I must have mistook Heavy ranged for all ranged, and the college was me forgetting to update to new unionism changes. I tried to remove most outdated language and reworked some of her background in purple
@Rose The minimum age of entry into any of the schools is 14 years old. You said she enrolled at the age of 13, so I'd like for you to fix this. Since it's a minor edit, I'll approve this application with the expectation you fix it. When you do, be free to revert the colored text back to default.
@Rose This was an oversight on my end. Celate Schooling does overrule the 14 age requirement; you are good to go!
Everything looks good, but despite how vexing it is you must convert your format to the new Character Application. If you need any help through this process, create a ticket or message me through a forums conversation.
Based on the above comment, rejected for not updating to the new format upon request. You may get a re-review once it has been updated. @Rose
@FireFan96 not sure if I should tag you or set it for needs new reviewer but I've reworked their sheet/char to the new format
