Played Character Rydel Sylphaalor

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    .ೃ࿐ | Full Name: Rydel Sylphaalor
    ༊*·˚ | Nicknames: Ry, Little Man, Selkie
    .ೃ࿐ | Race: Half-Maquixtl
    ༊*·˚ | Half-Fin'ullen
    ༊*·˚ | Racial Traits: Maquixtl eyesight, Maquixtl wings, Maquixtl pet lives, Fin'ullen form, Fin'ullen waterbreathing
    .ೃ࿐ | Age: 21
    ༊*·˚ Birthday: February, 7
    .ೃ࿐ | Gender: Male [He/Him]
    .ೃ࿐ | Occult: Void Magic
    ༊*·˚ | Affliction: None
    .ೃ࿐ | Concept: While Rydel grew up in a void aligned house, he grew to be the kindest sibling of the family. He is half a fighter, but he strives to heal all who needs it after a large fight. He is often nervous around new people, constantly worried someone may bring unwanted harm.
    ༊*·˚ | Rydel is a Magic Archer
    .ೃ࿐ | Appearance: Rydel looks more Maquixtl than the rest of his siblings, dark tanned skin, and dark brown hair. His eyes are a lovely baby blue color and he has a bright smile to compliment them. Rydel often wears blues, draping fabrics that are thin. His outfits are meant to dry swiftly, since he visits the water often. Rydel wears jewelry made from items he has found from the sea.​
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    .ೃ࿐ | Strength: 0
    ༊*·˚ | Atheltic: Building Scale [Free]
    .ೃ࿐ | Intelligence: 1
    ༊*·˚ | Adapt [Magic]: Oceana [Free], Wardrobe
    .ೃ࿐ | Dexterity [Att.]: 6
    ༊*·˚ | Ranger: Wallop, Bur, Hookshot, Splash
    ༊*·˚ | Roguery: Fleet footed, Escape artist
    .ೃ࿐ | Magic [Def.]: 7
    ༊*·˚ | Magic: Bolts, Snare, Smog, Cleanse, Warp, Shove, Summon
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    .ೃ࿐ | Languages: few
    ༊*·˚ | Known: Natl, Altalar, Common
    ༊*·˚ | Learning: Pannarokh

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    .ೃ࿐ | Stupid Luck: Rydel is the one non-brood in the Sylphaalor family, he does not look nor act like most of his siblings.
    .ೃ࿐ | Seen Through Sound: After coming back from a trip in far lands, Rydel came back with no sight. Later on he gained his eyes back, but he still uses the senses he grasped during that time in darkness.
    .ೃ࿐ | Pride: For a short time after the vampire crisis, Rydel was a Manathar until it was soon revoked from Aloria.​

     

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    Claimed for review
     
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    @BeaneyBaby Apologies for the delay! Please make the following edits and tag me once complete:
    • You're over the cap on proficiency points by 1 if I counted correctly

    I would also encourage you to move a good number of proficiency points into unspent; they feel very over-skilled for a 14-year-old. However, this is only a recommended change and not a required one.
     
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    I just removed cooking and took a few points from baking for unused points. Done and done.
     
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    @Azas Eyo, I re-did some points, added a lil thing to life story to support that. He is also 18 now.
     
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    Claiming this app for review! Expect a reply soon
     
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    Hey there! Going over your app now, but there's a few points that need to be tweaked before I can give it the greenlight:

    • You have 5 spells selected but have only purchased 4 with Point Buy. Please remove one or rework your points accordingly.
    Two minor notes would be that Shrewd Insight 1 is misspelled on the abilities section, and your Phys stat is incorrectly calculated. The 2.5 from Circus or Theatre would round up to 3, which isn't a big deal since you're capped but may be relevant if points are ever edited.

    Go ahead and tag me once you've made these changes and I'll look over, thanks!
     
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    I re-did all the stuff for ya! Thank you for claiming.
     
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    Looks good!

    Also as a heads up, the names of the languages have changed with the new update. Modern Altalar is "Altalar", Plains Altalar is "Saan", Kathar Altalar is "Katharic" and Suvial Altalar is "Suvial". You can read more about it on the Linguistics page towards the bottom of the list. I'll go ahead and approve but please make sure to edit these for clarity. Thanks!

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    @Yurs Updated to the new format!
     
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    Looks good!

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    @Yurs This sheet needs a full re-review. Im new to Manathar things. The boy is PORPLE now.
     
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    Looks great! I just need one thing clarified and then I'm happy to approve:
    • Go ahead and list which plane their sorcery comes from (I believe Manathar can only use Void). This is important to have documented for the sake of ability interactions.
    Once that's added go ahead and tag me and I'll get this greenlit right away! ^^
     
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    I FIXED IT! Thankk you!
     
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    @Yurs Good Evening! With Manathar being removed, here comes a whole Rydel re-design.
     
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    Howdy! So sorry for the delay, I got super sick this week.

    There's just one thing that needs to be clarified before I can approve, otherwise this app is perfect and the new design is super cute:
    • Please clarify which plane Rydel pulls his sorcery from. (Exist or Void)
    Go ahead and tag me once you make that edit, and I'll get this approved ASAP! Thank you ^^
     
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    Fixed it! I hope you get better soon!
     
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    @Yurs
    Updated stuff due to Maquixtl update.
     
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    Hi! I'm not going to review this just yet because the proficiency update is due to drop in a few hours. Tag me after and I'll pop on over to get this approved
     
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    @Yurs Beep boop. Prof time.
     
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    @Yurs Added Sanguinism.
     
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    I simply, re-did the app, and magic update.
     
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    Hey there! Quick review.

    Make sure to specify what his other non-dominant half is here, too. Fin'ullen I think.
    You don't have to spend all your points on Point Buy, but you should allocate them all out to the various Proficiencies. You can always change this later to reflect IC learning, afterall.
    Also, I would specify what dimension Rydel draws from here. My guess is the Void?
    It should be noted that while you get the Pet Husbandry Pack for free (which you should put in parentheses for clarity), it does not confer free Charisma Proficiency alongside it. So, you should only have 1 Charisma, not 2. Is just a Pack.

    Aside from that, looks good! Mark any changes in blue and @Tag me when you're all set.
     
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    ALL FIXED!! :D
    I re-did the Maquixtl Racials because they got slapped with the upgrade button!!
     
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    Maquixtl are cool.
    Speaking of Maquixtl, I'd just put Half-Maquixtl in the brackets, and in bold, to make it super clear that this is the dominant half.
     
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    All done!
     
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    Re-approved!!
     
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    @ezalB Heyo! I finally updated his points haha.
     
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    Artificer/Technician packs only grant two specials each, not three! Go ahead and just slash out two specials here. Also make sure to indicate what Artifcer branch Rydel is utilizing! Probably Vivitech.
    You should be sure to include a short description of Rydel's Void-based Soulrend avatar in the Appearance Section.

    @Tag me once you've made those two changes!
     
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    I made the changes, for the tech I made it arctech, because that's the closet thing to what he had before the update. o7
     
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    Arctech works! Just add a short description of the Soulrend form underneath Appearance or Abilities and I'll approve this.
     
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    Added!
     
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    Perfect! Approved!
     

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