Kinteh Rehkiirn

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    Character Information
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    ⊱Full Name: Kinteh Ravat’lahab Reah-Vashkiirn Dar-Rana Raz-Easifuh
    ⊱Otherwise: Kinteh Vashkiirn
    ⊱Born: Nenetl Cocolo
    ⊱Race: Slizzar
    ⊱Age: 26​
    ⊱Birthdate: August 22, 284 AC
    ⊱Star Sign: Leo
    ⊱Chinese Zodiac: Rat
    ⊱Gender: Unspecified
    ⊱Eye Color: Purple (Slizzar)
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    Core Concept
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    Kinteh is a full blooded Slizzar that, for much of her short life, has struggled with her image. She has deep seeded confidence issues and often finds herself as a follower. That being said, she is fiercely loyal to anyone she claims as family, going out of her way to be brave for them.​

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    Proficiencies
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    Strength: 2
    Warden Pack
    Comrade Pack​
    Constitution: 0
    Wisdom: 2 (
    Teslatech)
    Tussling Pack (Medical Patent, Common Patent)
    Mech-Suit Pack (Appliance Patent, Hacking Patent)
    Dexterity: 0
    Magic: 7 (Void)

    Displacing (Surfwalking, Airwalking, Dressage Cleanse)
    Materialism (Sanctum Vessel, Blood Crafter, Health Call)
    Enchanting (Arcane Mastery, Rune Smithing, Dueling Brand)
    Mimicry (Emote Infuse, Life Wall, Prison Break)
    Blessings (Chain Break, Memory Break, Arcane Sight)
    Breaking (Evil Tongues, Arcane Wardrobe, Water Element)
    Illusionism (Spark Element, Blood Element, Time Element)
    Charisma: 3 (Void)
    Demon Warlock Pack
    Demon Hexlord Pack
    Stupid Luck Pack​

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    Abilities
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    Greater Mage (Magic Blink, Mercy of Life, Illusioned Self)

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    Languages

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    Common (Free)
    Zoram (Native)

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    Appearance Information
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    Kinteh’s natural slizzar form is rather large. She usually stands around 5’10 or so, but her lengthy tail adds a few feet behind her. Her scales are silver, and her upper body and neck are covered with horn-like protrusions that frame her face. Her hair has a natural lilac and purple hue, similar to her slizzar eyes.

    Before her 18th birthday, Kinteh’s form took after her mother- a typical huactl with brown skin and dark brown hair. In this form she has green eyes, and stands just under 6 feet.

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    Life Story
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    Born as Nenetl Cocolo, she hails from a small maquixtil village in Daen. She never knew her slizzar parent, as her mother raised both she and her brother alone.

    Growing up, she never quite settled in her small, farming based community. From an early age she was interested in dusty old magic books, and realized she held the ability to cast spells.

    Upon turning 18, Nen fully threw herself into her shifting abilities. She left a letter for her twin brother, and set off towards Regalia seeking an adventurous city life.

    When she reached the city, Nen used her alias “Kinteh” to hang out with the magic using sort, eventually walking down the path of spell casting, demonology, and void worship.

    She spent a great deal of time living solely as Kinteh, eventually falling in love not only with Katharic culture but with a young Abyssal as well. She perhaps would have stayed like that forever, had a festering hunger to see her loved ones in power not grown.

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    Hello! I will be claiming this for staff review!
     
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    Sofaal would be the secondary language of a Cielothar half breed.

    Songaskians do not live on Daendroc where the Cielothar are from. Clarify place of birth.

    Pagan Priests do not really exist in Daendroc, or are a minority there.

    I would recommend reading through some of the racial and geographical lore when writing the backstory and incorporate proficiency which have very little mention. Tag me and highlight edits when you are done.
     
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    @Caelamus Hello~! I did a bunch of rewriting to the areas in red after reading your review and the reviews of a few non staff members. I was told to round up the physical stat so it changed from 17.5 to 18. I edited a few answers in the personality section to give a more clear view of what she feels and how she reacts to things. I then finally fully re-wrote her back story to better include details about her location, family, and the culture surrounding them, as well as a (hopefully!) better bit about her mutations. Thank you!

    Forgot to mention I removed the modern altalar bit. After re reading the yanar and cielothar sections, the yanar she would have been around would have spoken plains elven
     
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    @Caelamus Hi Hi! Given the Kathar update, I've made changes to reflect things that effected her character. I was also hoping I could get a thread clean up for the above comments. Thanks in advance!
     
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    Approved. Also thread cleaned.
     
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    @Caelamus I am so sorry. Another update to her profs. Thank you for your time. This should be the last, I've just had the hardest time trying not to be useless.
     
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    @Caelamus Hi! With the recent sorcery change I needed to make a couple of small edits to her abilities. Seeing as there is also a ritualism update coming, rather than have to change again soon I decided to switch her to full sorcery, and moved profs around to reflect the changes. Edits are in red! (If possible, could I please get a thread clean up too? Thank you in advance!)
     
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    Approved. And no, there's nothing really to clean beyond recent reviews. Those need to stay.
     
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    @Caelamus Hello! Updated to fit the new format, and changed anything that had been written out of lore/heavily modified. (So a lot lol)
     
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    KINTEH
     
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    @Acosmism Updated the sheet to reflect a mutation change! Only her eyes. Monster truth to exist ocular for the sake of having silver instead of black.
     
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    @Acosmism Hiya! Profs, abilities and appearance has been updated to reflect an ic change to crimson witch. Life story has been modified to better fit current cielothar and songaski lore.
     
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    @Acosmism Sorry for a tag the day after! I swapped 3 cooking points for healing alchemy.
     
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    @Acosmism My timing is abysmal! Changed to fit the Kathar update.
     
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    @Acosmism Updated sheet to fit the newest version of applications
     
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    @MonMarty Sorry I'm not sure if I'm supposed to actually tag you, but I've updated her profs and abilities, and then added a visual description for the illusion shift.
     
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    I will tag it as in need of a new reviewer.
     
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    @JinxNotJinxed Hello here's the review. App looks great, just some minor tweaks and you're all set. I need you to include a link to your played demon attendant or mark this as WIP if there is none yet. Mark the Demonology as Void as well.
     
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    @ChapterDeath Link added to the demon's page, and clarified void link!
     
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    @ChapterDeath Heya! Big changes. The proficiencies are the same in the magic section, but the other points as well as the rest of the page has been modified. I wasn't really happy with the state of the character, but I was unwilling to drop the connections and memories she's already made. After reflecting on what aspects of roleplay I enjoy the most when I play her, I ended up turning her into a full fledged manipulative shapeshifter- something she already pretty much was, just now minus the Odella ties and whatnot.
     
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    Specify Void next to demonology, but otherwise approved @JinxNotJinxed
     
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