Character Information Full Name: Alduir Stormblade Birth Name: Aldair Tempetyr Race / Culture: Breizh Ailor Age: 26 Gender: Male Occult: Godmagic Paladin Core Concept A Knight of the Faith, an Elen worshipper and a Villiers-Eclaire, the man is the epitome of grace and stoicism. Briezh customs stew beneath Unionist colors and shining armor, but the Knight is very much Regal in all aspects. Appearance Information Spoiler: Art Proficiencies Strength: 5 Technique Parry Knockback Sweep Battle Flurry Diving Tackle Unyielding Strike Constitution: 2 Shield Block Shield Wall Shield Slam (Ailor) Wisdom: 0 Dexterity: 0 Magic: 0 Faith: 7 Divine Defense Divine Blessing Divine Wrath Divine Aura Divine Savior Sacred Healing Sacred Revive Languages Breizh, Altalar, Sulvaley, Skodje, de'ithanie. Life Story / Plot Hooks The Knight speaks with a very thick Briezh Accent, but is well-versed in many other languages. He's never been seen with his helmet off, and rumors have spread. A faint aura of radiant peace surrounds him, like the sanctity of a chapel. He typically wears a heavy cloak, even in the depths of summer heat.
@fantuinn After hours of play, re-worked combat style, edited weaponry inventory, changed backstory to fit the updates, changed union blessing, gave him an inch of height because he's still young and growing. Just general updates after getting a feel for the character, marked for re-review.
@fantuinn Hi, it's me again, aged up few years for union blessings and calvary purposes List of changes: Aged up to 33 Added Union blessing x2 Swapped Perception for General Command (because you need 10 perception for anything useful) Shielding Combat for Calvary Purposes Added Languages (Parental) Added Ambience and Combat Themes (Aesthetics) Added personal creed under Personality (Aesthetic) Slightly Adjusted backstory to fit the aging up
Alrighty @fantuinn Archan Nerf leads to major character rework, lemme go down the list. List of Changes: Aged to 35. Changed lineage from Archan to Brannon Yeeted the two handed sword. Turned the guy into a one man testudo, complete rework of all combat skills. Phys cap raised to 35 Aesthetic image changes Minor backstory edits Cleaned up some of the listing As always, let me know if anything is fucky. Marked for Re-Review.
Sigh It's reworked Replaced talent with two schools, and a language. Nothing else is changed from last edit. @fantuinn
Pulling back into review. This lifting weight shouldn't be lifted at all, shouldn't be used in RP at all, and on top of this is generally absurd. Please remove this. Additionally, remove the image above the Life Story. It's a little too bloody.
@HydraLana Haven’t had a chance to even sit down at my desktop this week. Busy season for HVAC, I didn’t get home tonight until 15 minutes ago. Hopefully I’ll be able to fix it Sunday, I’m on call Saturday.
@fantuinn prof rework v3 changed his lineage, adjusted his profs to be spread out more so he wasnt just a combat focused nerd, and had some use outside swinging a spear really hard visual information updated, minor backstory tweaks should be in line, @ me if something's fucky marked for re-review
@fantuinn Hate to do this to you chief, been bouncing around on a ticket about a complete re-do of everything about the character, so standby for another one of these. Many apologies, just giving you a heads up.
@fantuinn Alrighty, done finally. After a long ticket with wump to avoid powerstacking abilities and ensuring everything is up to par with how I want the character to sit, I present, hopefully, the final rework of this character unless some major update. Appreciate the time, as always, let me know if something's fucky, appreciate it man.
@AshenRoman Only requesting you change the ability format from every ability being listed in a spoiler to his abilities being in a bullet point list. You can save the descriptions to an external document if you need easy reference.
@fantuinn Re-worked with new profs to match new goals for the character, changed template format. Marked for re-review.
@Yurs hi. Aesthetic changes. Minor point moving because pathfinding went poof without me realizing. Marked for re-review in case.
Howdy! There's just a few edits that need to be made before I can go ahead and approve again: You currently have an excess of 50 Core Points invested. Additionally, some investments are listed differently (such as Caster Ranged being marked as 15 and 12). Please double-check this section and ensure the math is correct. Once you've gone ahead and made the necessary changes go ahead and tag me again for another review!
@Yurs Hi. I just changed Vocal Arts to Construction, no other points were swapped. Tagged because it was 15 points.
Looks good! Your sorcery investment is 15, but it says 12 core beside it. Please go ahead and correct that after approval. APPROVED
@Yurs Edits made due to racial changes to specialties gave him a pet. Marked for re-review just to be sure. Changes in Blue.