Played Character Rafael Carano

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    Full Name: Rafael Carano.
    ⟹ Nicknames: Raf, Rafi, Ogre, Black Blade, Mutt, Heol, Devil.
    Race: Half-Eronidas.
    ⟹ Mix: Droque Ailor, Zabar Eronidas.
    Age: Twenty-six.
    Sex: Male.

    Occult:: Nope.

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    Identity
    〖 A hardened drifter whose heart of gold lies shoddily hidden by the brooding airs he continuously puts on. Rafael aspires to learn what it entails to be good in the wake of a bloody and turbulent past- all the while he anxiously asks himself if he can ever get the hang of it.
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    Strength = 7
    〖 Warden Pack.
    〖 Breaker Pack.
    〖 Bruiser Tackle Pack.
    〖 Fisticuffs Pack.
    〖 Shaker Pack.
    〖 Frenzy Pack.
    〖 Duelist Pack.
    〖 Comrade Pack (Eronidas Traits).

    Constitution 4
    〖 Ironheart Pack (Eronidas Traits).
    〖 Bulwark Pack (Eronidas Traits).
    〖 Counterplay Pack.
    〖 Bruteforce Pack.
    〖 Protectorate Pack.
    〖 Heavyweight Pack.

    Wisdom = 0

    Dexterity = 3
    〖 Reaction Pack.
    〖 Balance Pack.
    〖 Parkour Pack.

    Magic = 0

    Charisma = 0


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    Native
    〖 Droque

    Learned
    〖 Common
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    Physical Description
    〖 Rafael stands at a thumping seven foot with a broad-shouldered build hewn from dense, ruggedly sculpted muscle. The color of his skin is a warm dark tan while his hair is coal black, formed in an unruly mane of thick locks that is sometimes tied into a bun at its back in a futile attempt to establish any order to the chaos. He files down his tusks to a human semblance most of the time, and bears eyes of deep brown; fused with dark-gray sclera.

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    Rafael is raised on the crime-riddled streets of Hallonq, counting among the barbaric street urchins that scrape by for survival each day.

    The boy is taken under the wing of a mercenary warband. He is shown the art of war throughout an unending soldier’s march that takes him across the world.

    Rafael and his soldiers of fortune rally under the banner of Ryker Lampero. He is awarded knighthood, but abandons his belonging to the Blackmark Chapter following his arrival to the City Of Light.

    Rafael has now returned to the capital a man changed for the better, seeking to discover new livelihoods alongside uncharted parts of himself.
     
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    #1 Banard, Sep 2, 2020
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    Claimed for review.​
     
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    @fantuinn app reworked from the ground up
     
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    @HydraLana @fantuinn Unsure who to tag here, so uh... Sorry!

    Decided to shake Rafael's app up again, and for the final time. He's been made into a Blackguard Knight with a fanatic preference for heavy blades, and as such both his proficiencies, as well as his life story, has been remade.
     
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    @HydraLana i lied
    put the proficiencies into a blender and changed the backstory to incorporate an older character into em
     
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    @HydraLana decided to pull down the age by a bit and edited proficiencies accordingly
    adulthood section of the life story also changed

    will see to it that this is the last re-review for a good while, sorry for hassling you
     
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    @HydraLana decided to turn rafael into a half-orc

    pretty much everything that needed change has undergone it (i think), as well as an edit in the proficiencies
     
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    Uuuuuuum. Very bad timing, might want to read all of the new lore and take a few days to decide if you want to still make the change @Banard
     
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    @HydraLana okay attempt number two

    character's been rewritten into an eronidas, with changes having been made pretty much everywhere
     
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    @HydraLana Came to the conclusion that the green didn’t sit well with me and I wanted a stronger tie into Ailor, so I decided to change Rafael into a Half-Eronidas. Backstory has been minutely changed to fit it properly.
     
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    @HydraLana updated to the new proficiency stuff
     
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    @Banard approved, though just keep in mind that Rafael is essentially a one-trick pony when it comes to proficiency choices. Given his Blackguard lifestyle, this is fine, though consider down the road whether you want to shuffle some points around.
     
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    @FireFan96 i know this is very early but you made a really good point and i don't think it's right for him to be entirely dedicated towards combat, so i re-arranged the points by a smidge to even things out

    also added a mention about palattu fighting and made details on languages and how good he actually is with em
     
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    @FireFan96 played around with the proficiencies a little and decided to throw in light ranged combat because i want a lil more variety

    also changed alignment to lawful good in order to squeeze out some nice internal conflict
     
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    @FireFan96 wee woo
    proficiencies changed for a probable final time to fit in the spec perm
     
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    @FireFan96 i lied
    special weapon perm is gone, arken pact is in, changes to proficiency and alignment, as well as a vague lil addition to the life story to fit it all in
     
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    Peer Review: I noticed something while reading this application, you gave him Great Force and Gate Smash as abilities despite not having anything to give him those abilities, additionally he has 10 core points that are not spent as well as his physical stat being too high for what he has in points... It looks like you forgot to add +10 Strength Training to the list of points spent... Additionally he has 3 points invested in Linguistics but with his honed skill 2 ability he is able to take another language pack for free since he has invested 3 points into it. I hope you found this helpful.
     
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    @Banard it might be good to retcon into just Blackmark since Blackguard Knights are being terminated, or wait for the Knight Update to see if Bloodcast will make sense. I don't think the character will fit the new lore, but that will be up to you when it lands.
     
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    @FireFan96 ah, i thought since they were going to the background it might have been fine if i kept the association since he's left the order

    nevertheless, changes made
     
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    app updated
     
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    @FireFan96 sorry about the spam

    decided to make him a silven, life story edited accordingly
     
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    @FireFan96 boo

    app rewritten/brushed up on pretty much everywhere

    edit - going to rewrite it again, will notify anew when done
     
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    Remains approved
     
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