❀ Amelina Peirgarten - Pink Countess ❀

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  1. seoulmate

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    #1 seoulmate, Dec 5, 2016
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    THIS IS SO PRETTY I LOVE THE DIVIDERS
     
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  3. seoulmate

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    this is incredibly well written, you did a great job! keep it up!
     
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  5. seoulmate

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    Thank you so much!
     
  6. HodlinG

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    Your Application looks great! Just fantastically written. I hope you get her approved very soon!
     
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    #6 HodlinG, Dec 5, 2016
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    I believe she was referring to her family at one point treating her and her sisters like slaves. She is not saying her resentment is not done anymore, but the treatment from her family isn't done anymore.

    I love this app and can't wait to RP with Amelina some more! Beautifully written.
     
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    Oh! Oops! Right, I can see that now. Not sure how I might have missed that-- Ahah! I'm much too tired for this right now.
     
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    My Review:
    • Where was she born? Given how she is Ithanian-cultured, the way her family treated her given their generally matriarchal and female-based society is odd.
    • What was her family's status? You mention an estate in Regalia but it sounds like you mean out in the countryside, which I think is most rural with the estates there occupied by major Regalian noble families.
    • How did the dead Alexandre who was going to Jorrhildr somehow come back as a Deathling despite the fact that "Only characters with a valid grave either in the church, or the graveyard, can rise as a Deathling. Characters that died outside Regalia also cannot rise, but the base line is that any character that died at the hands of the authorities as a criminal cannot rise."
    Please tag me once the edits have been done in green @seoulmate
     
    #9 HydraLana, Dec 8, 2016
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    I believe all of the edits have been done! The families sheet is undergoing a massive rewrite, so I can link that whenever it is finished if you would like! I also believe I lost the 'Review in Progress' tag, but since I'm tagging you I assume that is okay?

    @The_Shadow_King3
     
    #10 seoulmate, Dec 15, 2016
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    Approved.
     
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    that was fast.... took me like 3 weeks
     
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    @seoulmate Johann is a guy? I think.
     
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    OOOOOOOOH MY GOD, how am I just now noticing this lol
     
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  15. seoulmate

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    I've updated this to fit the new format and make changes as she is no longer a Celyreos.
    Figured I would tag it as "Needs Reviewer" as I want to make sure it is all good to go!
    @HydraLana
     
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    Remains approved.
     
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    Updated for the proficiency system!
     
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    My Review:
    • I ask you reexamine your Cultural Points to ensure everything is allocated properly and the way you want it.
    • Please add a Languages section where it is appropriate in the Character Application format.
    • Please delete the Talents section as it is no longer part of the template.
    Tag me once this has been done in green @seoulmate
     
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    Changes fixed in green and areas deleted. @HydraLana
     
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    @HydraLana Updated with the new proficiency system!
     
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    @HydraLana Did a pretty hefty face-lift so asking for a re-review to make sure!
     
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    I love my wife
     
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    Re-approved.
     
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    Han Solo best fighter
     
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    @HydraLana HELLO! She has been updated with the new proficiency update!
     
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    Hey there! I'mma steal this so Approved!
     
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    @Katiesc Requesting Re-Review for vampy stuff added
     
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    Bump for new Profs!
     
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    @HydraLana New points with the new spread update/template update!
     
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    From what I can tell, no issues, Re-Approved.
     
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    @Lore i need re-review!! lots of points shifts and a change in what ame does
     
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    Claimed for review
     
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    @seoulmate Hey app looks great, just need two things from you. Please specify which branch of Artificer your character is taking in parentheses next to the applicable packs. Please specify in parentheses next to your Magic investment either Void or Exist, to note the planar alignment of your characters Magic. @tag me when edits are made
     

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