Ok so im revamping leon entirely now that im back not a lot is gonna change besides her parentage but ya could you re review it?
First off, this will need to be changed to 18. Server rules are that all characters must be 18 years old and up. You have 1 point left over. Invest it if you'd like or just mark it as extra. Please mark these changes in red and tag me when finished.
Ah shit sorry I forgot to take of the 17 and leave it 18 the charecter is 18 as of last June thanks for pointing that out I’ll fix it in a jiffy
I made a mistake. Return this to a 3 and youll have 50 points, sorry for my poor math skills. Approved.
A shit I forgot to take out dance TwT so sorry @festiveCorvid could you aprove of this it’s my mistake I apoligize
I keep forgetting to transfer over some information see I do all the editing in the doc and transfer it over but then I forget that I made changes and just...i feel so bad for making so many mistakes so sorry
I just put the wrong numbers in for the proficiency I took five sailing art away and distributed it through sword combat, instrument art, and fist combat
@festiveCorvid becuase of ticketed reasons I have to revamp the charecter again (TwT) it took some time but I’ve used my calculator and everything should be fine so I just need a repaproval
Youve used 60 points here, not fifty. You already have 30 points in regular proficiencies, then 30 in sorcery and engineering. Please fix this.
Hey @festiveCorvid so I have an even today at 5 pm that I need to be on time for (It’s the Pet talent show) TwT I don’t wanna hurry you but I’m gonna have to go in approved or not
A crap I forgot to change the age to 36 (it's like the smallest detail she still looks young tho so it's not that important) @festiveCorvid
You can only take one native language + Common as an Altalar. Taking a look over your backstory, it seems like the native language should be d'Ithanie since Leon spent the first part of her life in an Ithanian orphanage, not Daendroque and definitely not Katharic. Does the red eye come from any kind of affliction or mutation? The Eye Color entry is there to denote any visual afflictions-- things like Geists, Archons, Vampires, and Cahal. If not, then the heterochromia should be green/blue and not red/blue. Mark your edits in red and @tag me when you're done. Happy editing!
she grew up in deandroq @Scribbe with a katharic parent and she has an eye mutati0n but hey ill change it to orange and cyan blue i think? (i reskined it and dont know what kind of blue i used but hey its dark and looks nice)
You can still only have one native language. Also, it isn't mentioned anywhere in the life story that Leon has a Kathar parent, and your child only speaking Kathar in a place where everyone speaks Daendroque isn't going to be very helpful for them at all. Please pick only one. @Alikiforever
It doesn’t mention it cuz it was cut out because if I put Leon’s whole life story in there it gets long and hard to keep track of so my reviewer asked me to keep it short since I passed the point of no return with the details (I just keep details in my doc now)